Studio8 - Uniting the Arts

if this were Face Book I'd press the "like" button.

Interesting. A number of interesting ideas like

a seed can't pick its spot
it lands according to physics
long ago argued to oblivion
the elemental dilemma

You give food for thought this Sunday morning.

Very plainly and simply stated but that makes the feeling more poignant. Another excellent poem.

Good protest poem. Great last stanza.

Interesting---but that word "octosyllabic" got me looking for a strict measured 8 syllables in each line. The point is the "blue" and not the tentacles but the tentacles do tug.

This is a complex short poem. The more I delve into it the more I get meaning(s) out of it.

A lot in this. It is a gush of words, images, thoughts. Nice last line too. so many words in so many books dreaming like chanting monks There always seems to be that conflict between the human world and the cosmos. This poem sorts its way through as it moves down the page and that last line is earned.

not clever enough so i sit quiet take it all in like a drain everything is rattling in my pipes that are a calliope of indigestion a circus of burps false starts moons over Milwaukee Chicago on the el rattling holding on to the bar not clever enough to make nonsense out of logic and too feeble to th...

lost in the footnotes, in the appendices, in the mist that obscures knowledge the gray light, the ancient blur of imprecise definition the headlights are of no avail, the streetlights minor cadences in the smothering rhythm of a wet chill winter, the season long a season of cocoons and wandering, sc...

I tried to send you a private message but I can't figure out how to do it---so---I would like you to submit 5 or 6 of these poems if unpublished or other poems to the Loch Raven Review for the Fall issue.
Dan Cuddy

http://www.lochravenreview.net

Surprising ending. Beautifully written. Nobody else commented? If they don't read your poems they are missing out.

I must be careful not to exhaust accolades on your poems. I will understate this "these are damn good poems."

You are a master of these personal dramas. Excellent poem. You provide the shocking reason why the father/husband isn't warm to the American. I think that is a stroke of brilliance in the conception of this poem.

Another excellent poem.

Interesting poem. Almost a scroll of consciousness poem the way it starts with the woman in Fiji. The poem unfolds and takes the reader inside the poet's heart. The predominant emotions----what I get from the poem---are love and sadness.

Damn good poem. A great portrait of the adolescent male mind. I've norticed your poetry uses an economy of words. Very few (if any) missteps and wheezing between words. This poem is publishable.

I'm enjoying the poems at this forum.

I'm glad to read a lyrical, passionate, almost mystical poem today. Too often politics interrupts but a poem like yours is always welcome. It provides perspective as well as joy.