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by Marksman45 » March 2nd, 2005, 1:00 am
I wish it was non-linear. I think that's why most of "The BLIMP" was unsuccessful, I used linear narrative too much
That one goes like this:
Page 6
Doc's Office
The next day, Doc had to examine me before I could assume my duties.
DOC: Okay, Hank, we're going to do a normal physical examination. Then we're going to take a blood sample and give you loads of painful injections.
HANK: But I'm afraid of needles.
DOC: Great! That makes it interesting. But first, a distraction.
The lights went out.
HANK: I'm afraid of the dark!
I felt foolish after saying that. Then I felt THE NEEDLES__!@)$%(****~
Doc turned the lights back on.
DOC: There, that wasn't so bad, was it? Don't you prefer to get it over with all at once like that?
HANK: Personally, I prefer cremation.
DOC: Hah! Good one!
Doc put the blood sample in a machine. The machine gave a readout on punch cards. Doc looked at it and shook his head.
DOC: Come now, Hank, how long have you been on antidepressants?
HANK: What?
DOC: Hah! Just kidding. I love that one. Now, on with the examination.
He started looking in my ear with one of those light things.
DOC: Uh oh.
HANK: What? What is it?
DOC: It's a good thing your here. I just punctured your eardrum.
HANK: Whaaat?
DOC: Hah! Got you again! Man, you just walk right into these.
HANK: What the hell kind of doctor are you?
DOC: Actually, I'm a rocket surgeon.
The Balloon Major tumbled in.
MAJOR: Doc! I need help!
DOC: What's wrong?
MAJOR: I ate all the wrong things today.
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And, yes, the avatar is a picture of me. And thanks about the hats