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Post by judih » March 16th, 2005, 12:09 pm

i'd leave 'its' out of it

it morphs into watery babies that create eddies

'morphs' is a strange word - you either like it or not, but it works
hmmm
transforms is also a possibility

the it's its thing is tricky

though, it's its is very anemone-ish

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Post by Lightning Rod » March 16th, 2005, 12:11 pm

Panta,

I hesitate to give you grammatical advice, since you write English better than I do, and it's my native tongue (that is, if you classify Texanese as English.)

I would get rid of the awkward 'it's its' thing by rephrasing the statement.

"The stream of my mind creates it's own watery eddies."

or something like that
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

The Poet's Eye

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Post by panta rhei » March 16th, 2005, 12:19 pm

okay - seems the it's-thing is just solvable through re-composing the sentence, and that the general 'it' (as in it's hot - it's obvious - it's me who is weird) cannot be used together with the plural form in english (not: it's us who is/are weird).

thanks, judih and clay!

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Post by Marksman45 » March 16th, 2005, 2:00 pm

The pural form of "it" in such cases is actually "it." Isn't that wonderful?
The English language was never really thought through.

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Post by Marksman45 » March 16th, 2005, 2:14 pm

I should clarify though; statements such as "It is (insert rest of statement here)" are considered bad practice and are discouraged by grammar teachers.

I, however, am not a grammar teacher. I bet I could become one rather easily though.

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