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Life Is Good
Posted: February 5th, 2005, 11:28 pm
by Lightning Rod
Life is good
our bellies are full
and sedation is adequate
sure, there are toothaches
and blue warrants
but
love is in the house
like a squirrel in the wall
I won't contemplate eminent eviction
lessons are always on the jagged horizon
god, not another learning experience
but, yes, life is good.
Posted: February 7th, 2005, 12:44 pm
by Marksman45
fucking toothaches
who gave them the right, anyway?
Posted: February 7th, 2005, 3:16 pm
by Zlatko Waterman
Your simile:
" . . .love is in the house/ like a squirrel in the wall . . ."
Is superb, LR.
Do you know Galway Kinnell's love poems?
http://www.poemhunter.com/galway-kinnell/poet-9088/
This site is a selection of his poems. Your poem reminds me a bit of his ragged, yet totally precise, Irish/Scots tone.
Try" After Making Love . . ."
Brilliant simile in your poem--
Zlatko
Posted: February 7th, 2005, 3:54 pm
by Lightning Rod
gee, z-ko
you sure know how to get to a guy's heart
just flatter his simile
(works for me anyway)
actually, that line was pure reportage
we have a squirrel in the wall
doreen wants to evict the little critter
the other day I went out with a can of
foam insulation in my hand to seal the hole
I had alicia pound on the wall to scare him out
when he popped out of his hole
he was a cute little fucker and he looked me right in the eye
I didn't have the heart to seal up the hole
love is still in the house