Reprised from "Algonquin's Table", Poetry Zone,
on July 16, 2014, after retiring that thread.
Postby Steve Plonk on August 7th, 2013, 3:28 pm
Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Part One, of this thread...
UNDER THE DOME LISTENING TO LEON RUSSELL
By Steve Plonk
Listening to the Will “O” the Wisp tape watching ,
Once again evening shadows fall
The evening is fast approaching and my airport
Customers are cheerful as I take tickets/cash and exchange
Pleasantries, once again, watching evening shadows dip down
Like a sundial.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Jeffrey Gibson on August 8th, 2013, 8:44 am
Steve Plonk wrote:Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
UNDER THE DOME LISTENING TO LEON RUSSELL
By Steve Plonk
Listening to the Will “O” the Wisp tape watching ,
Once again evening shadows fall
The evening is fast approaching and my airport
Customers are cheerful as I take tickets/cash and exchange
Pleasantries, once again, watching evening shadows dip down
Like a sundial.
Author's Note:
Also see Studio Eight.tv ...Stories & Essays Forum
Why the threefold use of "evening" and the repetition of "once again"? It's almost as if you forgot that you just used these expressions. Moreover, sundials are stationary objects. They do not dip down, so your simile jars, and it is unclear who is doing the "watching" you speak of.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Rob on August 8th, 2013, 8:59 am
Steve
Have you considered posting your poems as separate poems? I'm not complaining, just wondering why you don't, as, if you did, you might get more exposure, and hence more readers and comments. Just a thought.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on August 8th, 2013, 11:14 am
Folks, I post my poems in one long thread to keep track of them better as a collection. I explained that in an earlier thread. Thanks for posting.
I use repetition in my poetry to mark the passage of time. I used to spend ten hours a day at the terminal.
The airport terminal had a very interesting rotunda which had windows acting like a sundial which, as you know,
is stationary. The shadows did an interesting show through the many windows. One could tell what time of the
day it was from the way the shadows were moving through the windows. The whole wide world is watching.
I have just a few who are lurking...
"The sun has risen, the sun is set, & I ain't out of the airport yet."
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on August 10th, 2013, 7:48 am
Just a little word from an old pelican bird, don't be afraid to post humorous poems or be absurd.
"Get rhythm, if you get the blues..." sang Johnny Cash. "He whose not busy being born is busy dying..." sang Bob Dylan. I continue the tradition of constantly risking absurdity. Life is that thing that happens to you when you're
making other plans, to paraphrase the bard, John Lennon. :-*
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on August 14th, 2013, 1:53 pm
Come visit my new Artlog In Studio Eight Forums. It is called "FLYING HORSE CAFE". We welcome new readers of poetry,etc.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on August 20th, 2013, 3:50 pm
“On With the Show”
By Steve Plonk
Spank ‘em if they’re bad, kiss ‘em if they’re good.
I don’t think any of us always does as we should.
If you’re feeling bad and I’m feeling good,
I’m gonna see how I can help if I could.
Food in the belly, roof over your head,
Air conditioning and a telly…
Not to worry, be in no hurry,
Easy does it, be flow with your go.
Hey, folks, let’s get on with the show.
Band’s gotta keep chooglin’, don’t you know?
Then, once again we’re headed down the road...
Soon to drop this heavy load...
Circa 2003, with small additions...
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Bobkaven on August 20th, 2013, 7:08 pm
Hello, SP.
Is the name an actual name, or is it — as I now begin to wonder — slang-speak for rough wine?
I don't need an answer, but my curiosity is piqued.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on August 21st, 2013, 9:18 pm
Bobkaven, Yeah, I got "Plonk" from Australian slang meaning "rough", "cheap", or "new" wine. I got "Steve" from the "Saint Stephen" tune in the "Aoxomoxoa" album by the Grateful Dead.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Bobkaven on August 22nd, 2013, 1:12 am
Thank you, Steve.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on September 21st, 2013, 8:55 pm
You're welcome, Bobkaven.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on October 4th, 2013, 7:30 pm
Since I constantly risk absurdity, I shall post some of my "scat penny haiku", also see Studio Eight.
All these gems were from several years backlog. (Keep in mind that my reference is to "Henry Gibson" of the
ancient regime TV show, "Laugh In", in penny haiku number three in this series...)
"SCAT PENNY HAIKU" (1)
By Steve Plonk
To pee, or not to pee,
Is that the question?
Whether pointers or
Sitters be--
Yet, we are all joiners,
Making the world wet...
This we must not forget.
***
"SCATTY PENNY HAIKU" (2)
By Steve Plonk
I'm proud to be
An American,
I'm happy to be free,
But I wish I was a pit bulldog,
& John Boehner was a tree...
I'd wet him down & he would cry &
he'd call his wifey to dry his eye.
***
"SCATTY GOOBERS FOR HEAVEN PENNY HAIKU" (3)
By Steve Plonk
(a)
There were lotsa scatty goobers
Who dropped all their loobers,
To try to capture farties--
Rubes, too, were roped in
The vigilant corral--
Where they bellowed like cattle
Over apocalyptic prattle,
With vertical smiles
Holding their drooling chiles,
Were disappointed by
A tongue-tied preacher,
Who misinterpreted a biblical teacher,
Captured everyones achy breaky farty
With musical notes off the charty...
***
(b)
Hearty har har, goes Christy in her flash car...
Sorry about that, Henry Gibson,
But my sight seems to turn like a prism,
Flashing & dashing & dipping my wick,
Until my hearty goes tick, tick, tick...
These fake revelations make me sick, sick, sick...
So let's wait another ten yarn,
Then, another rube, good lasso-er
Will come along with a big corral,
To turn regular ears into a sows...
Oxycontin to the unwashed masses...
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby ross on October 5th, 2013, 4:04 pm
this is very amateurish, and as Jeffrey noticed the repetition is boring,
'plonk' as aussie slang is 1960's, something I'd use but my daughter's generation call it 'goon'. You seem yo have an enthusiastic approach to poetry, a pity you can't combine that with some understanding of the poetic canon.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Bobkaven on October 5th, 2013, 8:24 pm
http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/plonk
Overheard while working in US detox in early 70's and intermittently since while chatting with alcoholics. Heard also in conversations with folks in Scotland and in England as recently as 2001. Of course it may have gone out of fashion there since.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on October 6th, 2013, 9:38 am
Folks, Poetry is in the eyes of the beholder. Wine is in the taste of the palate. My pen name is supposed to be humorous. Repetition in lyrics & poetry is sometimes called a "refrain". I like the way I write my humorous poetry.
Some folks don't like e. e. cummings, Vachel Lindsay, or Ogden Nash. I do...These guys are some of my mentors,
as is Jack Kerouac & Gary Snyder. The poems may be read at two or more levels. If one is just going for the
sardonic and/or bathroom humor, one may read at that level. These poems are political poems similar to political cartoons... It's okay to be "goon" once in a while. That's what "constantly risking absurdity" is about.
Folks, I know people whose last name really is Plonk. Enough of that...Thanks for scrolling down & reading my archived poems. Folks at the other site thought they were humorous & animated.
"Further on is into day..." C.S. Lewis
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby lurk1 on October 6th, 2013, 9:58 am
Steve Plonk wrote:Folks, Poetry is in the eyes of the beholder. Wine is in the taste of the palate. My pen name is supposed to be humorous. Repetition in lyrics & poetry is sometimes called a "refrain". I like the way I write my humorous poetry.
Some folks don't like e. e. cummings, Vachel Lindsay, or Ogden Nash. I do...These guys are some of my mentors,
as is Jack Kerouac & Gary Snyder. The poems may be read at two or more levels. If one is just going for the
sardonic and/or bathroom humor, one may read at that level. These poems are political poems similar to political cartoons... It's okay to be "goon" once in a while. That's what "constantly risking absurdity" is about.
Folks, I know people whose last name really is Plonk. Enough of that...Thanks for scrolling down & reading my archived poems. Folks at the other site thought they were humorous & animated.
"Further on is into day..." C.S. Lewis
General humour is easy to capture though, even I wrote one for teacher so that I could get out of trouble.
Working from memory but it was in the style of the poem we had just discussed previously:
This Is Just To Say
I'm sorry
for treating
you a fool.
The girl hid
in the cupboard
after you knocked.
Panicking
I decided to lie.
Next time,
I won't get caught.
I borrowed from a better poem to capture the humour so it's pretty artificial, but I felt in terms of content and audience it was pretty good. If you insist on creating funny poems, can't it be a little bit more original and just slightly more interesting? Like "Scatty Penny Haiku" you are just borrowing from Shakespeare and not bringing much cleverness into it. Good humour is witty, I can't find much wit here.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on October 6th, 2013, 10:33 am
"Vaulting out of the Vault"
By Steve Plonk
To my readers everywhere
Who to this poem pull up a chair,
Who read me mostly on air,
I write for "the eternal you",
Yes all of you whom I can't see
I try to reach those who
Never write to me,
I hope that a few nuances
Will stick like downy feathers
To help you through the stormy weather
That rolls through our lives,
From time to time,
Whether we are in the tropics
Or in a temperate clime,
Let me help you to pass the time,
To be your muse or amuse,
To be the poems you choose,
To lighten up your day,
That is why I sent these
Poems your way...
"When life's troubles hand us a lemon,
We are making some cool lemonade"
Into the cool lake waters of the mind
We shall to attempt to wade...
To change life's rude,
To a wonderful mood...
From my thread "Blasting Caps from the Vault, Part 2" on
Studio Eight's Poetry forum. Also published in Litkicks.com's "Action Poetry, July 21, 2011.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on October 7th, 2013, 7:10 am
Boonmats...
by Steve Plonk
"Boonmats From the Net: A Retrograde, Part 2"
Loathings and fear in retroland,
Sternutations from the minds of
Boonmats from the net,
Are frazzling my head, yet
Realizing a point of view
Has seen the stage without a cue
Fear and loathing in the real world...
Remember when you melted sen-sen
In your mouth to ward
Off the smell of cigar smoke?
At any rate, it's half past late
The ants have crashed the
Party we had in hell's kitchen,
Rats are dancing in the courtyard,
Fear and loathing reigns in the world.
I'm in the alley with the foo fighter blues
All the crazies congregate the avenues--
It's one o'clock in the morning
Do you know where your chilluns are?
Lands sakes, lordy, lordy,
Don't forget to pull that parachute cordy,
While sky diving.
Minds, like chutes, even tied one on,
Work only when they're open.
To me, a little ebonics pidgin token
Speak to us, those lips
I always trus' to open
Chatty Kathy rides again across the airwaves.
Yes'm, we've bagged the enemy
Just like a cat inna bag--
I hate to be a killjoy,
I hate to be a nag.
The chocolate is delicious
But the "stokely" had to go...
Are you seeing the gnats
That rest upon the sand fleas?
While drinking "aarack" in Iraq
Until the sun don't shine?
Fear and loathing in TV land...
The pill box has been
Emptied of its contents--
The oxy and the ribose and
Dr. Mom and nucleic acid tells us:
Big-eyed fiends from Venus,
Don't you come between us ...
Author's Note: This is a reprint, in slightly different form,
from Litkick's "Action Poetry" on March 4, 2005, as a response to
Levi Asher's "Fear & Loathing" title.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Bobkaven on October 7th, 2013, 12:28 pm
http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrym ... poem/19639
http://www.poetryoutloud.org/poem/176432
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on October 8th, 2013, 9:48 am
Bobkaven, Thanks for posting the above poems. NIce to know that others, too, currently write in dialog .
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on October 29th, 2013, 2:25 pm
Time to refresh my poetry thread...
HALLOWEEN AGAIN
By Steve Plonk
Halloween Halloween...
What a beautiful costumed scene.
People knock at the door,
Asking "Trick or Treat?"
A treat is what's in store.
Chewy sweets, & those sweets
Which melt in your mouth,
Gum & hard candy to chew.
Most candy wrapped like new.
A mummer's holiday,
An Autumn party time,
A time for favors & new flavors,
Halloween Halloween...
Candy corn & raisinettes bean,
Little ghosts & goblins at the portal,
Giggles, laughs, guffaws & chocolate chortle...
Halloween Halloween...
Halloween time again,
Welcome old acquaintances & friends...
See my new pattern,
For a jack 'o' lantern...
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on November 4th, 2013, 12:45 pm
“FLY VAN: Another Dream”
By Steve Plonk
To: “doctors without borders”—
We lived in an airplane van,
Which flies help
Everywhere it can &
It’s alright by me…
Our plane is a sight to behold,
Painted green, white, & gold,
Well, its alright by me…
We have a little plan,
To help the poor & sick
When we can,
It’s alright by me…
Yes, we are
A merry band
Living in our
Flying van
That’s alright by me…
We help as many
As we can,
Living out of our
Airplane van,
That’s alright by me…
All in a dream,
All in a dream…
On a brave fine day…
In addition,
When we land, we have found,
Our fly van has a partition,
What a sight to behold,
A green cross on our hood,
Highlighted green, white, & gold,
It’s alright by me…
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on November 9th, 2013, 11:16 am
Hello out there in Poetry Zone. Time to refresh this thread, to hopefully be read.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on November 21st, 2013, 12:58 pm
Time to nudge this thread back into the limelight.
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Re: Amazing Dawn Poems, Part 3
Postby Steve Plonk on November 27th, 2013, 7:18 pm
Howdy, howdy, come readers, come all, hope you enjoy these poems.
Happy Thanksgiving...
