Some Penny Haiku, Outside the Stall, Part 1

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Some Penny Haiku, Outside the Stall, Part 1

Post by Steve Plonk » February 19th, 2011, 3:06 pm

Steve Plonk Posted: Tue Sep 14, 2010 3:22 pm

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"Take Out Penny Haiku"

We like Chinese,
If you please,
We like Chinese,
If you don't please...

We like scrumptious food
From China,
No other take out
Could be finer.



"Hummingbird Penny Haiku"

Hummingbird watcher
Hummingbird watcher
Glimpses birds buzz by
As they fly...

Hummingbird detector
Hummingbird detector
Watches birds sip nectar,
As we play "I spy"...

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eugeneherman Posted: Tue Sep 14, 2010 11:41 pm

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haiku it don't rhyme...many many syllables...haiku ain't the blues... BTW haiku is a 'Japanese' form of 17 syllables, line of 5, line of 7, line of 5. Just cuz' you mention hummingbirds and an Asian country don't make it haiku... I'm just sayin'!


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Steve Plonk Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2010 2:46 pm

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Authors note: To Whom it may concern: This is my own personal invention: "Penny Haiku". It is a non-syllable short poem with biographical or antedotal narration. I try to break out of the restriction and asiatic tightness of the
current format of the so-called "haiku". I am quite aware of the
poems "non-syllable" appearance.

I've been posting these for many years and only a few critics have
been astute enough to realize or care about the difference.
I used to call them "graffito" or "graffiti" or "shortening poems".
Some of the poetry rhymes, some has rhythm and some have
syllables--but not necessarily. Most are uplifting narration and
use whimsical references to nature, songs, and nursery rhymes & life style.
Some are even like maxims. I sometimes even call them "Cantos" or "Blues".
My canto is has more autobiographical & lifestyle info. Ezra Pound would
turn over in his grave.

In fact, I deliberately posted them here instead of in the "Haiku" forum for exactly the reason you used in your criticism. Someone once thought they should be called "Two-cent Haiku". I also have posted them in my standing column, "Life in the Horse Lane", and on Litkicks.com's "Action Poetry". My column, at Studio Eight, lets me "horse around" a little more. I like this blog.

"Bog-Gob", a now defunct local magazine, published a few of them here in Chattanooga, TN. I used to also publish commentary there and elsewhere. My heading used the same name:
"Life in the Horse Lane". My "muse steed" is rather like a "rocket horse" or like "Mr. Ed" and also very astute. I take these poems "straight from the horse's mouth"... Pegasus ain't got nothing on me... A rocket horse for a "rocket age".
But the Pegasus is still a great metaphor for my brand of physical poetry and prose. If it wasn't for Hunter Thompson inspiring me, my prose would not be possible.

One of the first poems that I used the phrase was used with an
abbreviation: "P. Haiku". People thought it was more clever to
simply say "Phaiku". That title phrase wore out after a while and I soon
started calling them by their full name: "Penny Haiku". These poems
have a thirty year history behind them. I was inspired by T.S. Eliot, "King Lear"
Gary Snyder, Jack Kerouac, Allen Ginsberg, & John Lennon.

Thank you for stinting so well & inspiring me to write this impromptu history of "Penny Haiku". I may even post a copy of this, in my standing column. Make it so...


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joel Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2010 3:26 pm


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I liked the poems (sucker for rhyming)...but I loved the history! Thanks for sharing!
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eugeneherman Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2010 4:30 pm

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I like this piece of yours... ...
We see thick
Dark gauze of clouds
Hide the blue sky
All is grey...4 pm.

Storm has been
Going on for
More than an hour...

Time is compressed
Yet awareness
Is still fleeting...

Thoughts come &
Go as daydreams
Of other days &
Storms of past...
...It seems to have less and flow more than what I would call your 'blues ditties', with the repeated lines aka 'call and response' of these Chinese food and hummingbird pieces.


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Steve Plonk Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2010 4:35 pm

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Joel, glad you liked these pieces. I really appreciate your poetry also.
I am certainly also pleased that you liked my impromptu history of
"Penny Haiku".

I made a reprise of this piece on my column "Life in the Horse Lane".
Oh, I should like to name my "rocket horse muse" : "Stewball". So, you are the first person to hear of it, outside my immediate circle of friends. I "knew my song well before I started singing..." to paraphrase Bob Dylan in a "Hard Rain's Gonna Fall"... Would you believe Bob Dylan will be seventy next May? I can't omit Bob Dylan in my influences. But then I absorbed it like a sponge and I have a legion of influences. Like it was once said: "Build a dock and a ship will come in".


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Steve Plonk Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2010 4:47 pm

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Glad you forebeared the axe, Eugene... A quote from my "Sixtieth Summer Penny Haiku, Page 8",on Litkicks "Action Poetry" ...It was from a different mood and a different time...The poetry flowed from the inspiration of blustery summer days...it was a magical moment. Don't forget the quotes...

Some folks like rhyme and some don't...That's why I write my "penny haiku" in different styles and formats depending the "muse of my steed", as one could call it. I like to call it a "Vatic Voice" after the guy who first coined it--see earlier topic in my column...

Think of my standing column as a dock or a landing strip... I've really enjoyed
the people and posts here at Studio Eight. I welcome criticism and thrive on it.
Hopefully, the more positive, the better. We all can't be Shakespeare. I would settle to just be a "Steve Plonk". I've got my own potpourri of style, and hardly ever gave it a critical thought until just recently. Not everyone "gets me" every time...


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Steve Plonk Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2010 4:05 pm

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Twin Penny Haiku (Cats)

Puddy tat watcher
Kitty cat watcher
Feeds cats their chow
As they meow...


Kitty kat keeper
Putty tat keeper
Gives treats to chew
Hears them mew...


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.Lucy. Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2010 6:51 pm


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Very cool!
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Steve Plonk Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 7:46 pm

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Thanks, Lucy. Glad you liked my whimsical "penny haiku".
A bit of encouragement always helps. (Like your poems, too, and your
humorous advice column. )


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emel.scott Posted: Fri Sep 24, 2010 12:52 am

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I think these are a chopstick in the eye of haiku writers everywhere and you should be ashamed! On the other hand, they are witty and fun and haiku writers should get a sense of humor.
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Steve Plonk Posted: Fri Sep 24, 2010 1:24 pm

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Emel.scott, thanks for your comments,
Herein are more "penny haiku".


Twin Autumn Penny Haiku

Chopstick in eye,
Paints on mascara,
It only cosmetic...
Metaphor intended.

Soon crows will sound
A wake up in October,
Louder than next field rooster--
An elder will wake to fry
Family hot cakes...


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Steve Plonk Posted: Thu Sep 30, 2010 4:07 pm

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"Festival of Life, 1971, Penny Haiku"
By Steve Plonk

(1)
We dreamt of a burnt out castle,
The gypsy gal & I,
Holy, holy, holy
We prayed ourselves to sleep--
In the burnt out castle keep...

(2)
We shivered in a heap,
In that past time,
Within our acrylic blanket
Sleeping bags, on straw mats,
Our pillows were our hats...

(3)
The castle turned into the DC mall,
The castle was just our dream,
Coupled in an old canvass pup tent,
But the night caused us to shiver:
That was no imagine...

(4)
We'd lost our permit and had to vacate,
Could no longer demonstrate that morn,
Yesterday's final demonstration was for
Clean air, clean water, save the forests &
End the Vietnam war,
Soon we'd leave to get outta harm's way
We caught a ride by "The Hand of Glory"...


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Steve Plonk Posted: Thu Sep 30, 2010 4:40 pm

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"New Misc. Haiku"

Cats meowed
A loud meow,
Heard a thump--
Something is
Out of place,
As cats play chase...


Girl, don't worry
'Bout nuthin'--
We got plenty of pizza,
With lots of stuffin'...
Come on down.


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Steve Plonk Posted: Mon Oct 04, 2010 7:57 pm

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"Bicycle Penny Haiku"
(1)
My bike broke a sprocket,
In the town of Woonsocket,
So we went down there
To get a repair...

(2)
Once we got our tires
Filled with air,
We were ready to bike
Right out of there...

(3)
I used to ride my bike
More than ten miles a day,
It was good for the psyche,
It was the summer of 1966,
I never wrecked it or had
To have it fixed.

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Re: Some Penny Haiku, Outside the Stall

Post by Steve Plonk » February 19th, 2011, 3:11 pm

Steve Plonk Posted: Thu Oct 07, 2010 12:40 pm

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"Andante Penny Haiku"

If I could recapture
That simple rapture
Of my first communion
When my mind was
Captured by doves cooing
Above the rafters,
Fifty years ago
In St. Alban's Church,
Then I could rest
My ribboned soul...


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Steve Plonk Posted: Sat Oct 09, 2010 1:19 pm

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"More Autumn Penny Haiku"
(1)
Sun strobes glistening
Through trees as we
Drive home--
Back & forth through
Leaves light shone...

(2)
Leaves come fluttering
Down in the breeze,
Gently making swooshing sounds,
Before they touch earth...
Near our driveway...

(3)
As we arrived in driveway,
We park the car,
Opened the doors--
Our Maine Coon cat
Greeted us by coming
Up & rolling in leaves,
Gently mewing & looking up...


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Steve Plonk Posted: Sun Oct 10, 2010 4:37 pm

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"Caw-Caw" Penny Haiku

I don't know why
Things go awry
When we mind
Our own beeswax & all--
But pesky crows keep coming
Around our parked car,
Leaving their "cawing" cards...
Eating most suet in front & side yards...


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Steve Plonk Posted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 4:22 pm

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"Hurray Obama Penny Haiku"

Who's the nice man,
All black & tanned?
He's the President
Of this Land...
Sound off,
Bring it on down:
One, two, three, four,
One-two, three-four!


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Steve Plonk Posted: Sun Nov 07, 2010 3:51 pm

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MORE AUTUMN CATS PENNY HAIKU
By Steve Plonk

1) Orange tabby’s under chair
Hear plaintive meow
Wants to get her
Dinnertime now.

2) Cat’s under chair
Making coughing sounds
Needs hairball remedy
To scarf it down.

3) Rubbing heads,
Cats purr
While grooming
Each other’s fur.

4) We were smitten
By a Maine coon kitten
With a long gangly tail.



5) Now many years
Have passed—
Fifteen years he
Traced in this place,
Now some grizzle on his face...

6) Maine coon cat
Slides down poplar tree
Like a fireman down
A fire station pole.

7) Maine coon cat
Looks to the right & left,
Licks his front paws,
Curls up & takes
A nap at foot of tree.

(8) British shorthair
Tabby mix swipes
At mouse-on-sticks
Lets out: “Ow, ow, ow!”


9) Once, Tennessee tuxedo
Cat chases rubber ball
Up & down the hall,
Bouncing it on the wall.

10) Then the ball rolls
Down the stairs—
Cat scats after it...
Through the partition,
Cat is in great condition.

11) Orange tabby is pudgy & flabby,
But still chases after lightning bugs
Making flashing traces.

12) Basement crickets
Don’t stand a chance
When tuxedo cat
Does his dinner dance.



13) Next door we hear dachshund
Bark at Maine coon,
As cat swipes at dog
Through the fence...

14) Dog jumps up & down,
As Maine coon cat
Spins around,
Playing games through fence.

15) Cat gets up on the woodpile &
Goes over the corner
Of the fence, chasing a
Squirrel up poplar tree,
Squirrel says “Whee, whee, whee!”

16) All three cats
Pose for a photo
On living room couch—
Orange tabby puffs up
When she sees tuxedo cat—
Maine coon is non-chalant &
Preens his muzzle...

17) Later on, in his special place,
On our screened back porch,
Sitting proudly, Maine coon
Cat watches the sunset
Avidly purring loudly...

18) Our alpha-male Maine
Coon cat is our occasional
Outside cat--British shorthair
Orange tabby is our
Inside lady duchess...
Tuxedo cat is our undercroft
Dweller--he’s our younger feller.


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Steve Plonk Posted: Mon Nov 08, 2010 1:05 pm

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SAVOY DOO DAH PENNY HAIKU
By Steve Plonk

(1)
Savoy Savoy
where i visited
when a boy--
the starlight
is bright
beneath Mt. Blanc
in Savoy tonight/

(2)
Folksingers sing
in the streets &
Gypsy caravans
travel to where
they want to go
in old Savoy/

(3)
The moon of the Gitan
is full above the gitaru melody
"At the Blacksmiths"
Which plays tonight &
We make out as
We return to Savoy
on the train/

Circa 1977, Revised Nov. 2010


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stilltrucking Posted: Mon Nov 08, 2010 1:19 pm


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thank you Steve and please keep them coming



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happytrails Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 9:52 pm

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I like it. I'm just wondering is there a rule for penny haiku? or is it take it as it comes?


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jim turner Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 7:19 pm

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Hey, Steve, call them whatever you like, they're yours. But I suggest "funku" because most of them are fun to read. jim


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Steve Plonk Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2010 6:37 pm

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Thanks for the postcards from the net. Glad you liked my Penny Haiku.
Here are some more below

BORNE ACROSS THE WATERS PENNY HAIKU
By Steve Plonk

(1)
Yes, i was borne across the waters
On a ship--
Harbors of my toddlehood
Are dimmer to me now...

(2)
i was brought across
th ocean on a ship from Nippon,
th harbors are rough in
early childhood..
Not knowing
Where you lay anchor, near Sydney/

(3)
Yes, i remember Honolulu, as
i was sailing across th pacific
Tropical Ocean on a ship--
The harbors are blue-green &
So am i in my primaries much later...
But i sail on to my warmwater harbor
In Leghorn, Italy...

(4)
Yes, It's true i came across the sea,
The muddy river's near
The Bay are where
My towboat chugs/
It's pushing barges
To the the wheel of rivers
The heartland of our nation.

(5)
Like our nation,
i look toward mellow older years
Borne across the waters near
Staten Island,
Waters of the ages roll on...
As J. Lennon & i chew the fat
Over bag lunch sandwiches...

Circa Sept. 1979, Revised Nov. 2010.


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Steve Plonk Posted: Sat Dec 04, 2010 5:58 pm

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CHILEAN MINERS RESCUE PENNY HAIKU

By Steve Plonk

(1)
The cinch pulled
The elevator capsule up
From the mines
To rescue Chilean miners
Rescued 33 from
A black abyss...

(2)
Rescued miners
Had to wear
Shades because the
World outside the
Collapsed mine was
Too bright to see...

(3)
Copiapo, Chile—
For around 72 days,
33 Chilean miners
Were trapped &
Had to have
Oxygen & water
Piped down to them
Through tubes...

(4)
Then, rescuers, with
American & international
Help, bored a rescue shaft
More than 2000 feet
To the collapsed mine—
NASA helped with
Survival tactics....
Not one life was lost!

(5)
Sleep pattern exercises
Were also suggested
By NASA...
To help the miners
Adapt biological clocks
To absence of light,
Before rescue...
All celebrated when
The miners returned!

(6)
As for me,
The longest tunnel
I’ve ever been in,
I think, was either
The tunnel near
Mt. Blanc, France, or
The Chesapeake Bay-
Bridge Tunnel in
Virginia, USA—
***
So, except for being
In Mammoth Cave,
Or Carlsbad Caverns,
I have no idea how
Dark the mine was—
Hooray for the miners!.


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jim turner Posted: Sun Dec 05, 2010 1:28 pm

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Now this is all fun to start an infidel's drizzly Sunday morning. Call 'em whatever you like if you coined them. Much ado about pennies, I say. But I'm a patsy for them:

PENNIES FOUND IN PARKING LOTS

How that drop from the sun,
golden, catches my eyes!
I can’t resist. I’ll stoop
to pick it up and whoop
to myself with surprise.
I save them, one by one.
Uncommon coins, I say,
and bright spots in my day!

Jim


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Steve Plonk Posted: Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:55 pm

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Jim, glad to inspire the whimsy in you. "Penny Haiku" spirit lives on!


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Steve Plonk Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 8:44 pm

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"Kyoto Penny Haiku"

By Steve Plonk

It all started with morning sunrise
In my eyes in my baby carriage,&
With the sound of a gong--
It was Kyoto and I was aware
For the very first time,
To the sights & sounds around me...


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Steve Plonk Posted: Thu Dec 16, 2010 2:50 pm

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"Restaurant Penny Haiku"
By Steve Plonk

(1)
While at "The North Chatt Cat"
(Bar & grill)
I nursed a cup of java
After eating my fill...

(2)
While at
"Aretha Frankenstein's" Pub,
I nursed an icewater &
Twist of lemon,
After eating my grub...

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Re: Some Penny Haiku, Outside the Stall

Post by Steve Plonk » February 19th, 2011, 3:14 pm

Steve Plonk Posted: Tue Dec 21, 2010 6:20 pm

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"Advent Christmas Penny Haiku"
By Steve Plonk

(a)
Bring out the advent candles
Bring out the wreath,
Bring out your joy of childhood belief,
Bring out the perfumed logs,
Light the yuletide fire,
Toast with eggnog,
Listen to a Christmas choir...

(b)
Bring out generosity
Bring some relief
To those less fortunate
To those subject to grief,
Ring out churchbells,
Ring out the chimes,
Recreate the rituals
In your festive minds...

(c)
Remember Christ is born in your heart
To your hearts be true to this time,
Relive the heartwarmth tales,
In the spirit of the clime...
Ring out yuletide cheer,
Count blessings of family & friends,
For those all far & near,
Happy Advent, Merry Christmas &
A golden New Year!


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"Life in the Horse Lane" Column. It is in the archives of the Poetry forum.
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