...and i'll go mine
Posted: April 5th, 2008, 1:19 pm
...and I'll go mine
so many things you cannot do
limitations, conventions
old and new
each as confining as the last
rhyme - archaic,
alliteration and assonance - cliche
more imagery, no abstraction
structure, intent, content -
ashlar, concrete, cement...
great taste, less filling.
what are you trying to prove?
what cheap sentiment;
you're running the risk of appearing passe -
the horror,
as if the present is so engaging -
as if the future won't someday be the past,
your considerations are being considered
considerably, but
so many things you cannot do
limitations, conventions
old and new
each as confining as the last
rhyme - archaic,
alliteration and assonance - cliche
more imagery, no abstraction
structure, intent, content -
ashlar, concrete, cement...
great taste, less filling.
what are you trying to prove?
what cheap sentiment;
you're running the risk of appearing passe -
the horror,
as if the present is so engaging -
as if the future won't someday be the past,
your considerations are being considered
considerably, but