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...and i'll go mine

Posted: April 5th, 2008, 1:19 pm
by constantine
...and I'll go mine


so many things you cannot do
limitations, conventions
old and new
each as confining as the last
rhyme - archaic,
alliteration and assonance - cliche
more imagery, no abstraction
structure, intent, content -
ashlar, concrete, cement...
great taste, less filling.
what are you trying to prove?
what cheap sentiment;
you're running the risk of appearing passe -
the horror,
as if the present is so engaging -
as if the future won't someday be the past,
your considerations are being considered
considerably, but

Posted: April 5th, 2008, 2:22 pm
by westcoast
i like it..
don't often see you rhyming
good show

~westie

Posted: April 5th, 2008, 2:27 pm
by constantine
thanks western one. those photo treatments knock me out!