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the caves of marabar

Posted: September 25th, 2010, 10:16 am
by constantine
rhythm in the backwash
black hole pulsing, null - mute
ancient muddles,
like the caves of marabar
easier to get in than out

ionic bonds dissolve
random particles, crumbs
snake skin and nail clippings
this is the natural order
this too is rome

there are insects who live a lifetime in a day
they twiddle their thumbs and call it free will
cheap knock-offs of a second edition
incestuous, with every woman they know
my head is a fossil whose time has come

Re: the caves of malabar

Posted: September 25th, 2010, 11:06 am
by hester_prynne
So much in this to ponder...in a good way.
"ancient muddles". I love this....
H 8)

Re: the caves of malabar

Posted: September 25th, 2010, 11:12 am
by constantine
thanks hester. nice to see you!

Re: the caves of malabar

Posted: September 25th, 2010, 12:26 pm
by saw
the last stanza shines dino, as good as anything I've ever read....for real

especially the first two lines, but the whole stanza echoes like ancient history itself......let me just the whole poem is good, but the last stanza to me is super !

Re: the caves of malabar

Posted: September 25th, 2010, 9:13 pm
by .Lucy.
Definitely makes you stop and think...

And me thinks it's good!

:D

Re: the caves of marabar

Posted: September 26th, 2010, 1:33 pm
by still.trucking
I always find something to dwell on in your work.
My head is a fossil whose time has come
I been thinking about using that as a signature line

instead of this
"Though he has to earn a living,
Man dwells poetically on this earth."

"Yet it behoves us, under the storms of God,
Ye poets! with uncovered head to stand,
With our own hand to grasp the Father's lightening-flash
And to pass on, wrapped in song,
The divine gift to the people."

"But, friends, we have come too late! The gods are, indeed, alive,
But above our heads, up there in another world.
There they are endlessly active, and seen to heed little
Whether we are alive: that's how much the heavenly ones care."

"Perhaps some of the wisdom to sputter and of being
dumbfounded may be the inheritance that our spiritual
culture ought to transmit to the next generations."

http://mythosandlogos.com/Holderlin.html

Re: the caves of marabar

Posted: September 26th, 2010, 4:32 pm
by revolutionrabbit
facile, fossil, fuss all
no fuss no muss
the older the fossil
the more facile
the science
pushing back time lines
as the lines push deeper
into the fuss muss there
should be a science
on how humans
got so facile
fussy wussy
fusty flossy
fluster
faster
faster
fast-y
fate-y
fa
so
la
all
fos
sil
lit
tle
imprint
left
to
poet
on

nice little poem...from the caves marabar

Re: the caves of marabar

Posted: September 26th, 2010, 4:49 pm
by still.trucking
easier in than out
fossilized language
dead spirits
insane gods
dead gods
cheap copies

the surreal archeology of my soul


just a riff dino
dont mean nuttin
just say High jack :?

Re: the caves of marabar

Posted: September 26th, 2010, 7:11 pm
by Arcadia
this is the natural order
this too is rome


that made me smile, donĀ“t know already why, gracias!! :)

Re: the caves of marabar

Posted: September 27th, 2010, 12:49 pm
by joel
My head is a fossil
around the stone's lime
calcium carbonate
much pressure much time

tzuri v'goali
I whisper and rhyme
my rock and redeemer
are things not that I'm

Re: the caves of marabar

Posted: September 28th, 2010, 12:42 am
by hester_prynne
Doe Ray Me Fossil La Tea Dough!
(Couldn't resist..)
H 8)

Re: the caves of marabar

Posted: September 28th, 2010, 6:30 am
by constantine
thanks guys for the interesting and creative comments - always a pleasure.