Sweet Loraine

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Lightning Rod
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Sweet Loraine

Post by Lightning Rod » December 20th, 2008, 11:28 am

Sweet Loraine

she complained that she was a bitch
and she bitched about being a complainer
she was the imperfect perfectionist
I don't know how to explain her

her vanity was in vain
she tried hard not to try too hard
but the workload was light
so she spent most of her time looking busy

she could turn an itch into a wound
by her fond attention
she was very good in bed
couldn't see the forest for the tree
she crossed every eye and dotted every T

she was an ambulance before the accident
a memory before the event
virgin anticipation, letters opened
before they are licked and sent

she complained that she was a bitch
and she bitched about being a complainer
she was the imperfect perfectionist
I don't know how to explain her
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by constantine » December 20th, 2008, 5:08 pm

i think you explained her pretty well, but then again i never met her. well, maybe i have.

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Post by Lightning Rod » December 20th, 2008, 6:08 pm

ok, this is a three hour wonder
I wrote the tune in about an hour

I shipped the lyric to Barry Gremillion in LA
two hours later he sent this back

http://www.barrygremillion.com/musiccli ... icable.mp3
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by Nicholas » December 20th, 2008, 8:25 pm

do you have her phone number though?

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Post by Lightning Rod » December 21st, 2008, 2:34 am

her phone number is unlisted
but here are a couple of her identities


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"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by mtmynd » December 26th, 2008, 8:05 pm

<center>Electric Music For the Mind & Body

psychedelic

really.</center>

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intrigue

Post by creativesoul » December 26th, 2008, 9:16 pm

i love this description
if i do not know her i would like to meet her
was she amusing and humorous?
ahh of course
because she was
complainer and an entertainer
i like her

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