another remembered memory (dusk coastlines and a girl)

[bennie2]

the sky shone blue like a green marble and I, under her envelope of cloud, raised a hand to steady the tree that swayed like a reed in a beach-face, sea-forced wind, which hung around the promenade picking up sand, blasting the bark off her body and branches, and baring them naked to me.

[bennie2]

that is related to this (one of the few things I've written that's ever been published)

same girl...link with first booze experience... first holiday away from parents...

A smile at Sunset in France

Floating on an amber silence
under the almost done, dusk sky,
an aeroplane, and actually a few stars,
my fingers fondle the sand
as my eyes,
squinting from the fiery furnace embers
and electric, childlike diamonds
dancing on the ocean, feel the passion
from her terracotta smile at sunset
as her fingers penetrate the cool,
warm sand near her thigh shadow.

She knocks over her beer bottle
and watches the drink disappear,
way,
down,
under the surface as I turn away,
completely happy, and watch the sun disappear,
way,
down
under the surface. And this is my one,
genuine memory of France.

[K&D]

I really liked these pieces, especially the first post.

it feels organic. In the first post, i think talking about the tree you manage to describe a tactile thing, i always try to do that in my work.

how does something feel-phsyical qualities you know that sort of thing. I really appreciated it...it felt natural to me, i mean something that i could very easily understand/feel...i didn't have to work at it and in some cases thats what makes a great piece of writing.

[Lightning Rod]

now I'm starting to get it bennie
It's your rhythm that enthralls me
that and your use of adjectives
offhand descriptions that illuminate a scene

[bennie2]

thanks K&D

every time I read your location I silently break into song (as much as someone CAN silently BREAK into song)

busted flat in baton rouge...

man! you live there!!! fuck that! I went to new orleans (i pronounce it orleans because I'm lame) a few years ago with a friend and... we didn't venture out AT ALL during day light. we literally slept or hung around the AC room until 8 pm and then wandered around at night when the humidity was still like a horror story but slightly better than at daylight... we'd come back home around 3-5am and spend the time from there until 8 in the outdoor pool. then sleep.... I've been in the south a few times and I don't know how you guys cope!

[bennie2]

I'm glad you've figured it out, clay. the more you figure me out, the more I undestand myself.

this is for you clay...
people keep going on about global warming, we need to recycle more blah.. don't use plastic bags for shopping etc... you should recycle those plastic bags. the world is fucked due to global warming.. use the plastic bags to suffocate your children.



oh, PS, clay, I bought cool calm collected a few days ago... If I like it I'll send it back for you to autograph. If I don't like it I'll send it back.