the heart mender

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bethany
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the heart mender

Post by bethany » June 22nd, 2007, 8:30 pm

I wrote this while I was on this page... So it may not be very good.


It's kind of funny
when you think about it.
You never knew what was missing...
Until you found it.

You found my heart,
in pieces on the floor.
You helped pick them up,
and gave me back so much more.

I'm not going to say
that I'm falling for you.
Because falling is cliche,
and I think it needs a new view.

Why not the phrase "flying" in love?
Does it matter which?
Because falling sounds too hurtful,
and plus, you could trip.

And now, my friend,
without further ado,
I have to say this,
"I'm flying in Love with you".


=)
It was the dance that lasted a lifetime, but ended in an eye-blink.

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Post by Lightning Rod » June 22nd, 2007, 8:39 pm

bethany wrote: without further ado,
I have to say this,
"I'm flying in Love with you".


=)
I love this concept, bethany
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by joel » June 23rd, 2007, 5:41 pm

bethany wrote:I wrote this while I was on this page... So it may not be very good.

Why not the phrase "flying" in love?
Does it matter which?
Because falling sounds too hurtful,

I have to say this,
"I'm flying in Love with you".
beautiful poem! And I really like the question "Why not the phrase 'flying' in love?" I hate the term falling in love...it sounds like an accident of uncontroled something or other, but flying takes skill, muscle, strength -- or at least for us skill and faith in engineering!
"Every genuinely religious person is a heretic, and therefore a revolutionary" -- GBShaw

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Post by bethany » June 26th, 2007, 7:18 pm

aw, thanks... I'm glad someone agrees with it. =)
It was the dance that lasted a lifetime, but ended in an eye-blink.

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Post by Perdida » June 29th, 2007, 11:25 pm

"I'm flying in Love with you".

Hey, I love it tooooo

Enjoyed muchly Bethany

P :D

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Post by happytrails » November 9th, 2010, 8:56 pm

I am going to steal this phrase. It is so much more romantic than falling. I love it. Oh and the whole poem actually. It is lovely. That was 3 1/2 years ago, how's the flying going? Please don't tell me you broke a wing.

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Post by bethany » November 9th, 2010, 9:04 pm

happytrails wrote:Please don't tell me you broke a wing.
A wing was most definitely broken. I believe this was written my sophomore year of high school -ish. A REALLY long time ago, considering I'm in college now. I'm pretty sure I was just "in like" with the idea of being "in love".
But what I found out was: You have to learn to fly on your own before flying with others. =]
It was the dance that lasted a lifetime, but ended in an eye-blink.

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Post by happytrails » November 9th, 2010, 9:11 pm

Another good saying and excellent advice for other young girls to hear. And boys, too. You are a wise young woman.

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Post by bethany » November 9th, 2010, 9:18 pm

I give myself very good advice, but I very seldom follow it.
Alice in Wonderland

Me in a nutshell. =]
It was the dance that lasted a lifetime, but ended in an eye-blink.

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Re: the heart mender

Post by happytrails » November 9th, 2010, 9:34 pm

I am the same. I can tell people the smartest way to handle a situation, but when faced with it myself, I lose control and usually end up doing something I know I will be sorry for later.

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Post by jim turner » November 11th, 2010, 7:24 pm

Enjoyed this. It reminded me of one I tried to write years ago about honeymooners going for a walk (well, sometimes they have to do something different for a change or a rest) and the bride described the activity as walking but the new hubby said he thought "we were flying." jim

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