landing in flames

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mtmynd
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landing in flames

Post by mtmynd » January 1st, 2015, 4:45 pm

landing in flames
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the treason of reason
freezin in the season
i chill at the sound
of words that scramble
ramble and i gamble
with the print of letters
one pop at a time
from keyboard to ski-board

i've never felt compelled
or swelled or jelled
with the then or when
by only why's and
i ask is it wise?

questions like ignition
starting the mind
to journey as far as
this jalopy body can find
streets paved by ass-at-fault
roads filled with stone

i flip and somersault
thru the heir of being
without even seeing
where do i land
when i have fallen
from grace?
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Re: landing in flames

Post by 68degrees » January 1st, 2015, 8:59 pm

Not sure of the why of centering but would love to "hear" this and then it wouldn't matter how it was formatted. I like the two syllable cadence.

"…questions like ignition
starting the mind…" is a nice image.

"why's" and "wise"….nice.

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Re: landing in flames

Post by the mingo » January 2nd, 2015, 12:02 am

8) enjoyed, Cec -
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Re: landing in flames

Post by mtmynd » January 2nd, 2015, 1:46 pm

68degrees wrote:Not sure of the why of centering but would love to "hear" this and then it wouldn't matter how it was formatted. I like the two syllable cadence.

"…questions like ignition
starting the mind…" is a nice image.

"why's" and "wise"….nice.

68degrees
Why not please the eye along with the ear..? If one is reading poetry, I believe it can and should be a visual experience as well. Paragraphing the words is not only boring but more appropriate to novels, sci-fi, bios etc. Visual indicators, such as centering is visually satisfying and and makes the read more enjoyable. True, if you were strictly listening it makes no difference.

Thanks for the comments, 68degrees.
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Re: landing in flames

Post by mtmynd » January 2nd, 2015, 1:47 pm

the mingo wrote:8) enjoyed, Cec -
Gracias, amigo! thx for stopping in. ;)
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Re: landing in flames

Post by WIREMAN » January 2nd, 2015, 8:47 pm

cool scat......a rat-a-tat finger poppin adventure...bet you'd blast at a jam 8)
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....

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