a woman walks
a woman walks
a woman walks
thru the poems
by the poems
across the poems
walks all over the poems
in a black dress
with scarf and boots
she climbs the stairs of the poems
down the hallways of the poems
walks to the shore of the poems
puts her hand on the rocks
puts her hand on the sea
looks out on the vast waters
looks back
a red tie in her hair
she reads the sea
she reads the poems
she moves over the stones
mentioning the moon she
leaves the house
the door closing
as if by itself
behind her
thru the poems
by the poems
across the poems
walks all over the poems
in a black dress
with scarf and boots
she climbs the stairs of the poems
down the hallways of the poems
walks to the shore of the poems
puts her hand on the rocks
puts her hand on the sea
looks out on the vast waters
looks back
a red tie in her hair
she reads the sea
she reads the poems
she moves over the stones
mentioning the moon she
leaves the house
the door closing
as if by itself
behind her
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
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Re: a woman walks
gorgeous poem walk
thanks, the mingo
thanks, the mingo
Re: a woman walks
"the door closing
as if by itself
behind her"
aw yea!
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as if by itself
behind her"
aw yea!
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Re: a woman walks
This is an awesome poem. Bravo. The lilting repetition of she / sea / reads pushing the poem right along...I can "feel" this woman walking. I am with you and we are watching her.
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wow - my thx to everyone who read & said - ![Cool 8)](./images/smilies/icon_cool.gif)
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Re: a woman walks
mingo ... this is one of the most beautiful poems i've ever read... i walked right through it 3x now
Re: a woman walks
wow doreen - thank you - ![Cool 8)](./images/smilies/icon_cool.gif)
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Re: a woman walks
i see the walk....i smell her scent....i bathe in her light....we converse at the bar....bout jack and henry sipping on our stools...she leaves for a smoke and says, "Bye, im leaving this time"...i watch her with a grin.....yes it is a worthy one mingo ![Cool 8)](./images/smilies/icon_cool.gif)
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Thx Wireman - ![Cool 8)](./images/smilies/icon_cool.gif)
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Re: a woman walks
If there was a way to save favorites here, I'd save this. As far as critique goes, I'll go with what 68degrees said. The repetition of sounds works so well.
mentioning the moon she
leaves the house
!!
mentioning the moon she
leaves the house
!!
Re: a woman walks
I have been reading this all week. Must be a guy thing ![Wink ;)](./images/smilies/icon_wink.gif)
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Re: a woman walks
i think i might know what you mean ![Cool 8)](./images/smilies/icon_cool.gif)
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Re: a woman walks
I like this.
Only suggestion would be to eliminate one of the "poems"
with scarf and boots
she climbs the stairs of the poems
down the hallways of the poems
walks to the shore of the poems
But I like this poem a lot.
Only suggestion would be to eliminate one of the "poems"
with scarf and boots
she climbs the stairs of the poems
down the hallways of the poems
walks to the shore of the poems
But I like this poem a lot.
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