Irvine Park

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Irvine Park

Post by 68degrees » March 16th, 2015, 3:23 pm

Rain falls
into our lives
like grace,
rinsing years
from folded hands
and damp prayers

Only folks who keep
secrets understand
they have been invited
to share in its serenity
Last edited by 68degrees on March 16th, 2015, 6:11 pm, edited 1 time in total.

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Re: Irvine Park

Post by 68degrees » March 16th, 2015, 3:50 pm

I believe it.

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Re: Irvine Park

Post by whoaisme » March 16th, 2015, 5:24 pm

i'd rather read:

"rinsing years
from folded hands
and damp prayers"


but i'm just splitting hairs, this is a good one! keep em coming 68
"From the sudden invasion of a mind not my own in the world. This I will record. For whom? For m y s e l f, beyond denial and beyond indifference." - Philip Lamantia

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Re: Irvine Park

Post by 68degrees » March 16th, 2015, 6:11 pm

whoa:

Yes. I can see that change. I don't mind splitting hairs, I just don't have many left ;)

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Re: Irvine Park

Post by katydid » March 16th, 2015, 10:41 pm

do secrets breed serenity? I suppose if you are keeping secrets then someone shared them-- or are the secrets our own?

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Re: Irvine Park

Post by 68degrees » March 16th, 2015, 10:53 pm

katydid:

Yes. But only when they remain secret. Once out, no.

Maybe. We probably have more personal secrets, than secrets between people, don't you think?

Thanks for looking here and asking.

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Re: Irvine Park

Post by judih » March 16th, 2015, 11:00 pm

i appreciate this swish of a cleansing
the open invitation for catharsis
there for the taking

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Re: Irvine Park

Post by 68degrees » March 17th, 2015, 9:34 am

"swish" is such a nice sounding word...almost a wish, but just that much more.

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