1930's Movie Star
1930's Movie Star
naked woman sitting
in a kitchen chair
two days beyond solstice
this is what the rest of summer
will be like along with questions
some with answers
the woman will paint her face
on the nights the moon is up
and pop around the corner asking
"Don't I look like
a 1930's movie star?"
in a kitchen chair
two days beyond solstice
this is what the rest of summer
will be like along with questions
some with answers
the woman will paint her face
on the nights the moon is up
and pop around the corner asking
"Don't I look like
a 1930's movie star?"
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
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Re: 1930's Movie Star
remains to be seen
progress to unfold
no decision yet
progress to unfold
no decision yet
Re: 1930's Movie Star
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
Re: 1930's Movie Star
Best poem I've read in a long time. I'd like to write like this but then it wouldn't be you and that wouldn't be right. Thanks, el mingo, for this piece of inspiration... I needed it.the mingo wrote:naked woman sitting
in a kitchen chair
two days beyond solstice
this is what the rest of summer
will be like along with questions
some with answers
the woman will paint her face
on the nights the moon is up
and pop around the corner asking
"Don't I look like
a 1930's movie star?"
Last edited by mtmynd on June 24th, 2015, 11:14 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: 1930's Movie Star
Thanks for that Cecil -
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
Re: 1930's Movie Star
no, no, my friend. thanks goes all to you.
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Re: 1930's Movie Star
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Last edited by columbus on June 27th, 2015, 11:17 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Re: 1930's Movie Star
Sorry 'bus, some of these things happen to me, others I have to build. This one was a build not a readymade. Came from disparate (maybe even desperate) parts. Sort of a glue & notch job. My punctuation bag I had left in my rucksack back at base camp and there was nothing but Indian country between me & it. The conditions I work under here on the slopes of Tug Hill Plateau can best be described either as impossible or improbable & that's at the best of times. So, I need some help here - if you were going puncture-rate this what would you use & where would you place them ?But dang it, would still appreciate punctuation!
Thx
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.
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Last edited by columbus on June 27th, 2015, 11:18 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Re: 1930's Movie Star
i agree with 'bus
however, i gotta disagree with your word change. i like "with" better than "having"
the punctuation makes a great poem even better.
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however, i gotta disagree with your word change. i like "with" better than "having"
the punctuation makes a great poem even better.
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Re: 1930's Movie Star
form stifles stride
all the breaks
are like roadblocks
as are the periods
i dig your style of writing
keep em flowing mingo
all the breaks
are like roadblocks
as are the periods
i dig your style of writing
keep em flowing mingo
me I feel like I'm becoming some kinda Kung fu t.v. Priest.....
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For sure... pause when you want, breathe when you want and feel the vibe as it was written... when poems become too structured they lose their individuality, their voice.WIREMAN wrote:form stifles stride
all the breaks
are like roadblocks
as are the periods
i dig your style of writing
keep em flowing mingo
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