my head was in the shop ( what is your estimate ? )

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saw
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my head was in the shop ( what is your estimate ? )

Post by saw » September 20th, 2016, 12:22 pm

I thought my strings were dead
but it was something in my chest,
so I kept playing that Snow in San Anselmo,
croonin' like a drunken Van Morrison

a madman looking for a fight,
even the massage parlor madam
had turned me away, she sad
there is too much sadness in your eyes

so I headed home to the stand-up bass
and stretched those bastard wires
to the brink of absurdity, the novels
on the shelf vibrated, alive

in their trembling spines....
broken hearts will make you crazy
the blisters on your fingers
tell you this wasn't a dream

I had something to play out
in the dark corner of the room
with violent water 'cross the cheeks...
the light would come when it was ready
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

theirishsea
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Re: my head was in the shop ( what is your estimate ? )

Post by theirishsea » September 20th, 2016, 1:49 pm

Nice---especially

so I headed home to the stand-up bass
and stretched those bastard wires
to the brink of absurdity, the novels
on the shelf vibrated, alive

in their trembling spines....
broken hearts will make you crazy
the blisters on your fingers
tell you this wasn't a dream

I had something to play out
in the dark corner of the room
with violent water 'cross the cheeks...
the light would come when it was ready
The Irish Sea Is Always In Turmoil, Even When Calm.

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dadio
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Re: my head was in the shop ( what is your estimate ? )

Post by dadio » September 23rd, 2016, 1:51 pm

Captured well :)

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mnaz
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Re: my head was in the shop ( what is your estimate ? )

Post by mnaz » September 23rd, 2016, 2:13 pm

Wow, Kerouac lives again, though this is even harder and truer to the bone..

Nice.

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Terri
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Re: my head was in the shop ( what is your estimate ? )

Post by Terri » September 23rd, 2016, 6:01 pm

yes, like this a lot
what irish said, but i like the lead-in, too
wonderful title!
(we'll have your head back thursday
repairs took a little while
since it was foreign-make)

saw
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Re: my head was in the shop ( what is your estimate ? )

Post by saw » September 25th, 2016, 9:18 am

thanx y'all ...enjoyed the comments ( especially Terri that answered the question... 8) )
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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