consideration for my neighbors

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saw
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consideration for my neighbors

Post by saw » January 18th, 2017, 12:22 pm

sure I can proselytize
with the champions of the world
left to my imbecility and ego...
I'd rather couch my prejudices
in flowery stanzas
that hopefully don't hit you

picture a verbose sledgehammer

It's not that I'm looking for followers
shit, i can barely keep my own
train on the tracks, it's just
I can't help myself, I have to write
and apologize if I've offended any
of your senses over the years

mental vomit is often projectile

things come to me from the sky
they fill my head to saturation
droplets form on the tip of my nose
then drip upon the writing tablet
for transcription, I am a victim
of an ballooning mind

a double bubble bubble... doubled

without poetic ejaculation
I'd be as tense as a steel girder,
with no cold shower around,
with no avenue to relieve the pressure
my head would become ammonium nitrate
where one more single thought
could blow up the whole fucking neighborhood

I'm sure you see my point
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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revolutionR
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Re: consideration for my neighbors

Post by revolutionR » January 18th, 2017, 4:02 pm

Screw em....shout it from the roof tops. :shock:

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mnaz
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Re: consideration for my neighbors

Post by mnaz » January 19th, 2017, 3:20 am

Let 'em ricochet their half-baked
pendulations (there is no such word)
back and forth, doesn't matter much
in a place of sharing, plain and simple.
It's what we do, what we have to do,
what moves us.

theirishsea
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Re: consideration for my neighbors

Post by theirishsea » January 21st, 2017, 10:17 am

Excellent.And this is unified from top to bottom. No tangents. I like so much----I can't quote anything because I'd just reproduce the poem.

Even seemingly throw way lines like

shit, i can barely keep my own
train on the tracks


fit in beautifully. These words are just the right colloquial note.

I have a queasy sensibility at times----I picture this too well but it is an apt metaphor, just right here

mental vomit is often projectile

same with this below

without poetic ejaculation
I'd be as tense as a steel girder,
with no cold shower around,
with no avenue to relieve the pressure
my head would become ammonium nitrate
where one more single thought
could blow up the whole fucking neighborhood


when first reading this, this reminds me of a certain public figure who gave a speech yesterday

picture a verbose sledgehammer

For not wanting to quote, I quoted a lot but it is the whole poem that speaks.


The Irish Sea Is Always In Turmoil, Even When Calm.

saw
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Re: consideration for my neighbors

Post by saw » January 21st, 2017, 2:35 pm

thanx danno, rabbit , mnaz....power to the people
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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dadio
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Re: consideration for my neighbors

Post by dadio » February 4th, 2017, 6:12 am

Gets to the heart of the matter well. 8)

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