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- faithmairee
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It started with a stolen glance
then two, three and maybe four
somehow, even then i knew
we were linked forever more
even though the physical attraction
was very strong indeed
i felt our souls connecting
as you sat down next to me
there was a sparkle present
in your engaging eyes and
i felt a kind of happiness that day
that i had not felt in years
they say that love is patient
and they say that it is kind
so i kept my love a secret to keep
from interferring in your life
it didn't matter that you loved another
for i knew that in the end i would win
one day you would be mine
it was only a matter of time
you said that i was special and
you had feelings for me too
when you said you loved me
my long held dream came true
then two, three and maybe four
somehow, even then i knew
we were linked forever more
even though the physical attraction
was very strong indeed
i felt our souls connecting
as you sat down next to me
there was a sparkle present
in your engaging eyes and
i felt a kind of happiness that day
that i had not felt in years
they say that love is patient
and they say that it is kind
so i kept my love a secret to keep
from interferring in your life
it didn't matter that you loved another
for i knew that in the end i would win
one day you would be mine
it was only a matter of time
you said that i was special and
you had feelings for me too
when you said you loved me
my long held dream came true
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
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- faithmairee
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Y R U zeroing in on a single line
we all have our own unigue way of expressing ourselves...it almost feels like you are judging me
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
- stilltrucking
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You are probably right
I think I was judging you young
I think I was judging you a woman
I was thinking abut that other love of her/him.
Did she/he think that they had won?
It took me awhile to get to that last line. TIme loves happy endings.
I don't know anything about poetry.
I know less about love.
I know less than nothing about woman.
I know a lot about lust.
still gnaws me after all these years.
I should not judge
I search these boards for anything I can write to.
Thanks
I wish you happiness in work and love.
I think I was judging you young
I think I was judging you a woman
I was thinking abut that other love of her/him.
Did she/he think that they had won?
It took me awhile to get to that last line. TIme loves happy endings.
I don't know anything about poetry.
I know less about love.
I know less than nothing about woman.
I know a lot about lust.
still gnaws me after all these years.
I should not judge
I search these boards for anything I can write to.
Thanks
I wish you happiness in work and love.
Faith, I like this poem....I can relate very much to that feeling of knowing.
The happy ending has eluded me most of my life, and as a result, I've learned that love at a distance is really good for me. Maybe even the best of all.
I think this verse:
there was a sparkle present"
in your engaging eyes and
I felt a kind of happiness
that i had not felt in years"
is a little awkward and could be less so, but hey, that's just my opinion.
All in all, I enjoyed reading this....
it's got a soft, mild, wildness to it that I like.
go with it, add more verses!
It's rich for that...
H
The happy ending has eluded me most of my life, and as a result, I've learned that love at a distance is really good for me. Maybe even the best of all.
I think this verse:
there was a sparkle present"
in your engaging eyes and
I felt a kind of happiness
that i had not felt in years"
is a little awkward and could be less so, but hey, that's just my opinion.
All in all, I enjoyed reading this....
it's got a soft, mild, wildness to it that I like.
go with it, add more verses!
It's rich for that...
H

- faithmairee
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the only thing
The only thing men must be aware of is that inside every woman is a goddess.lol...thank you all for your feedback...i appreciate it ALL!
faithmairee
faithmairee
There must be a poem in here somewhere.
- stilltrucking
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I was not judging you as much as judging myself. Inside every woman is a goddess, oh yes I agree. But what is inside a man?
Besides nails, snails, and puppy dog tails
That is what I was wondering.
And I lied.
Love is won, all we have to do is look to nature and the competition to find a mate.
Thinking about a Richard Brautigan poem where he says that sometimes it so sweet to wake up in the morning and not have to tell someone you love them.
I think too much
Your poem set off a lot of emotions, isn't that what a poem should do, take an ice pick to frozen hearts.
Don't think twice, everyone here knows I am stupid. maybe I am just senile.
I was just happy to have something that I wanted to reply to.
Thanks
Besides nails, snails, and puppy dog tails
That is what I was wondering.
And I lied.
Love is won, all we have to do is look to nature and the competition to find a mate.
Thinking about a Richard Brautigan poem where he says that sometimes it so sweet to wake up in the morning and not have to tell someone you love them.
I think too much
Your poem set off a lot of emotions, isn't that what a poem should do, take an ice pick to frozen hearts.
Don't think twice, everyone here knows I am stupid. maybe I am just senile.
I was just happy to have something that I wanted to reply to.
Thanks
- faithmairee
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You are appreciated
I appreciate you for what you are and am honored that my poem moved you in some way. Thank you for your response and taking the time to read my poen to begin with 
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