and i light a smoke having no idea what the fuck to write

[YABYUM]

their faces in a mountains shadow they're evrywhere i am
a smoke a drink a laugh a few shots to the grill and waking up feeling
could be death could be hangers holding me over right side hurts
smoke a demi death god drink a sip then go a thousand
miles are riddles dreams sceam fly puncuate my words as if i be a balloon as if we be exclamations in a footnote for our heart

[Dave The Dov]

Write down and sort it out later!!!!
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1920 recession

[Diana Moon Glampers]

Yes yes

Like this:

Belief & Technique in Modern Prose

1. Scribbled secrete notebooks and wild typewritten pages for yr own joy

8. Write what you want bottomless from the bottom of the mind.

9. The unspeakable visions of the individual

10. No time for poetry but exactly what is

11. Visionary tics shivering in the chest

13. Remove literary, grammatical and syntactical inhibitions

19. Accept loss for ever.

>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Walking around with my fly open
Oedipus fucked his own eyes out
such dangling hangine meat

Golda Meir
snip
on the wall
snipped
Pussy whipped

[the flaming ace]

i'd like to whip golda meir's pussy
even if she's from milwaukee
and thread the highway once agin
if only in memory

[lenny]

their faces in a mountains shadow they're evrywhere i am

##A good beginning but no follow up tie-in.

a smoke a drink a laugh a few shots to the grill and waking up feeling

##A good picture emerging and imagery.

could be death could be hangers holding me over right side hurts

##Good continuation of second line.

smoke a demi death god drink a sip then go a thousand

##Wafting into vagueness for me and leaving thread that was being established.

miles are riddles dreams sceam fly puncuate my words as if i be a

##It is obvious you are musing here but the reader should be able to follow your musings to retain the readers interest.

balloon as if we be exclamations in a footnote for our heart

##This is only my very humble opinion, yabyum, but I think more focus would greatly enhance this piece. Please don't be mad at my assessment as that is all that it is - my assessment. Thanks for sharing.

lenny