Sleeping on a Balloon

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Sleeping on a Balloon

Post by Lightning Rod » March 31st, 2008, 9:16 pm

(you may think this poem is a metaphor, but it's not. I actually sleep on an inflatable mattress.)

I sleep on a balloon
it's hard to keep your balance in dreams
the world can roll in an instant
people change faces
one minute you are chasing
the next one you are being chaste

I live on a balloon
sometimes air and sometimes helium
now and then gasses beyond description
the ether of dreams

I bounce on a balloon
better than a trampoline
bungee buoyancy
like walking on air
skiing on the void

I sleep on a balloon
my dreams could bust at any moment
awakening's torn membrane
if you fall off the balloon in your dreams
you never hit the ground
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by westcoast » March 31st, 2008, 9:59 pm

inspiring. i love how you write. gets the creative juices going here.

~westie

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Post by constantine » March 31st, 2008, 10:12 pm

this reads rather smoothly. very imaginative as well.

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Post by Lightning Rod » March 31st, 2008, 11:00 pm

westie,
I always pleased when I can get a woman's juices going, creative or otherwise

constantine, that was a rather nice compliment
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by constantine » April 1st, 2008, 8:42 am

i guess i sounded a bit stuffy. didn't mean to. how's this: the poem has all the qualities that a poem should possess.

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Post by stilltrucking » April 1st, 2008, 10:41 am

thanks clay
I can relate to this one
Poetry is spooky stuff for me
I never really know why a poem hits home with me.

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Post by Lightning Rod » April 1st, 2008, 12:24 pm

constantine wrote:i guess i sounded a bit stuffy. didn't mean to. how's this: the poem has all the qualities that a poem should possess.
I wasn't trying to sound snippy either.....just couldn't resist the joke, haha
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Post by Dave The Dov » April 1st, 2008, 1:28 pm

Try sleeping on a cloud.
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Post by Terri » April 1st, 2008, 3:02 pm

I love this. The last verse kills me. In worse times, I slept on an inflatable mattress. F***** kept deflating in the middle of the night; I'd wake up in this womby thing, all wrapped up. Better luck, Lrod.

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Post by constantine » April 1st, 2008, 3:11 pm

i used to deflate it on purpose whilst you slept. e-e

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