One Night

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saw
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One Night

Post by saw » July 14th, 2008, 6:03 am

one night I tried to catch
the monsters in my head,
but they were more elusive
than I anticipated,
and I was drinking so fast
the bartender said, "slow down
and let it hit you", but I belted
down the scotch and broke
the cheap snifter with my teeth,
chewing the glass til blood
ran from the corner of my mouth,
blotting the flow with cocktail napkins,
and the red was the most vivid
part of my day, so I swallowed
the shards to cut a pathway
to my heart, slicing open
the blocked passageways
and clearing all the channels
that lead to peace and happiness....
and the gremlins scurried like roaches
to someone else's head.
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Post by the mingo » July 14th, 2008, 8:59 am

"slow down and let it hit you" - hey, as a piece of advice, that statement packs sand, saw, thanks for all that and lets raise a glass to all the elusive monsters in our heads. Salute!
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by goldenmyst » July 14th, 2008, 9:03 pm

Saw this paints a scene lucid and vivid as an electric dream. Well done.

John

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Post by saw » July 15th, 2008, 6:30 am

thanx mingo and John.....scene after scene, turns into a life.....
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Post by hester_prynne » July 17th, 2008, 11:40 am

A Toast to this!
Indeed, another jewel...
Another soulful radiant write...thank you

H 8)
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

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Post by SmileGRL » July 17th, 2008, 4:00 pm

saw...raw and as if your tongue spoke from the dark corridors of my miNd and i still hear the echo deeP within. i spoke of gremlins and blood manY times before, but nEver like this and yet aLways like tHis...


[awesome writ]

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Post by saw » July 17th, 2008, 4:27 pm

thanks a lot hester and smileGRL...you both always make thoughtful
comments........good to hear from ya............peace........steve
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

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Post by judih » July 17th, 2008, 11:11 pm

it hurts to feel good

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