and we, on Monday mornings, no longer meet.

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and we, on Monday mornings, no longer meet.

Post by Perdida » July 29th, 2008, 9:52 am

what am i supposed to do
when I watch the distance between us -
(through the back windscreen of our lives)
stretch
like a tree-lined dirt road, winding; far away, big as a house?

shades change, and we’re a pair of yesterdays
swinging ourselves inside-out

what am i to say
when on the edge of me, in the middle of no-where
love and maybe’s hide, in side streets, in-between stars,
between sighs, twisting the truth?

tomorrow creeps up - quiet . . .
carrying the basket full of hope
the glass half full, the black and white of reason
and we, on Monday mornings, no longer meet.

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Post by SmileGRL » July 29th, 2008, 11:25 am

beautiful & sad. there is so much to read between the lines...

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Post by Arcadia » July 29th, 2008, 1:34 pm

beautiful reminder, perdida!!!!! :)

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Post by bennie2 » July 29th, 2008, 2:22 pm

"on monday mornings, no longer meet"

that was my favourite part of this. I don't know why. I'd hazard a guess and say i like it because it sums up the whole piece - something that used to me, is no more.

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Post by constantine » July 29th, 2008, 2:24 pm

eloquently expressed perdida.

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Post by Perdida » July 30th, 2008, 9:37 am

SmileGRL, Arcadia, bennie2 and constantine, thank you so very much for reading, your lovely comments and your time. Much appreciated.

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Post by judih » July 30th, 2008, 9:48 am

love the title - perfect summation of those impossibly unresolved feelings

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Post by saw » July 30th, 2008, 12:06 pm

beautiful expression ..........steve
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Post by the mingo » July 30th, 2008, 1:01 pm

"a pair of yesterdays" ...we cannot help but flaunt the haunt such a great hollow space it carves within us - which here you have cleanly outlined in such manner as now it haunts me. Delicious.
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by hester_prynne » July 31st, 2008, 4:28 pm

A beautiful read....I really dig this...
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Post by Perdida » August 1st, 2008, 5:58 pm

Judih, Steve, The Mingo and Hester....
thank you so much for reading, for the "delicious", the "dig", and the "beautiful".

Appreciate your time and comments.



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Post by mtmynd » August 1st, 2008, 11:21 pm

i keep coming back to this line like it was a friend ;

"shades change, and we’re a pair of yesterdays
swinging ourselves inside-out "


thanks, Perdida, for this journey of longing in memories freshly picked.

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Post by Perdida » August 5th, 2008, 5:43 pm

i keep coming back to this line like it was a friend ;

"shades change, and we’re a pair of yesterdays
swinging ourselves inside-out "
mt? I hear ya.
Thank you muchly for your lovely reply.

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