1313 Drivelly Lane

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Nazz
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1313 Drivelly Lane

Post by Nazz » August 23rd, 2008, 4:55 pm

Welcome to my drip tank,
where the floor is cold and beer is warm,
where wallboards warp and women are flat,
where the paint is fresh and chips are stale.

Welcome to my insipid lips,
where quatrains pale and the image fails,
where sextets are sterile and metaphor, puerile,
where the muse masturbates, verse equivocates.

Step into minor hell, the beige hole.
Let's write a long poem about sprawl,
about gushing, smog-ridden souls.
I can't wait to spill it all.

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Post by Lightning Rod » August 23rd, 2008, 5:21 pm

this is a very amusing poem, nazz

love 'muse masturbates' --great alliterative image
and 'beige hole' is great understatement
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

The Poet's Eye

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Post by constantine » August 23rd, 2008, 5:32 pm

you've been on quite a creative roll. fine work.

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Post by Arcadia » August 24th, 2008, 9:30 am

Nazz!... it´s a so saturday-poem!!! :lol: I´ll whistle it next time, but now the day is so bright!!!!!, the river is waiting...!!!
thanks for the inspiration!! :wink:


(the three wise monkeys don´t work
smoking islands
no-mirrors)

you´re welcome

warm your feet in the seventy´s rug
while I listen to you singing
Guns ´n´roses & Joaquín Sabina

drink,
saviour also my drops



(los tres monos sabios no funcionan
islas fumando
no hay espejos)

bienvenido

entibiá tus pies en la alfombra setentosa
mientras te escucho cantar
canciones de Joaquín Sabina
& de Guns ´n´Roses

tomá,
saboreá mis gotas, también

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Post by Nazz » August 25th, 2008, 12:52 pm

Thanks L Rod, Dino, Arcadia...

Inspired by Bennie. Thanks! !sknahT

Arcadia! 'three wise monkeys'... oh that's good. can I steal that one? And savor, I will!

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Post by Doreen Peri » August 25th, 2008, 12:56 pm

This is a fine piece of writing!

*rising to applaud*

very nice

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Post by Nazz » August 25th, 2008, 12:59 pm

Thanks Doreen.

My meter was running on this one... ha...

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Post by Arcadia » August 25th, 2008, 1:46 pm

wow! great weekend-chain-production!!!!!!! :D savor?? hey, you won´t saviour them??? :lol:

the fourth? sure! :wink:

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Post by Nazz » August 25th, 2008, 3:21 pm

ha! cuando pienso en 'savor', pienso en sabor. sabroso... cuando pienso en 'saviour', pienso en Jesus... hehe..

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