Until Then, I'm Just Crazy

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Lightning Rod
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Until Then, I'm Just Crazy

Post by Lightning Rod » November 1st, 2008, 11:34 am

if I had the money I would be an eccentric
until then, I'm just crazy

I could sequester myself in a penthouse
if I had the funds
grow my nails until they curl
hire mormons to fetch me fast food and codeine

I could sail a balloon round the world
disappear mysteriously
leave a fortune to my cat
if only I had a fortune to leave
I could be an eccentric

until then, I'm just crazy
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by Doreen Peri » November 1st, 2008, 12:14 pm

I like this poem. Clever .... in a Howard Hughs sorta way ;)

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suggestion... if you're going to say "until then, I'm just crazy" why don't you change it to "when I have money, I will be eccentric"?

would read better to me

just an opinion

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Post by constantine » November 1st, 2008, 3:18 pm

it has a stand up comic feel that i think the title reinforces.

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Post by stilltrucking » November 1st, 2008, 4:28 pm

A poem, I can relate to, a lot.

If I was rich I could be buried in a Ferrari in stead of a cardboard box.

I liked the title too.

sincerely

crazy jack
son of crazy mike

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Post by hester_prynne » November 2nd, 2008, 10:08 pm

Wheee heee, now this makes me dance...
Love this LRod....could be a song for sure.
H 8)
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

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Post by SmileGRL » November 3rd, 2008, 6:01 pm

maybe life is too short to try and please everyone all the time. or to be "normal"...anne hathaway said "we all have a freak side that we need to display proudly"...be you, proudly, even if a little offbeat/eccentric/freaky. of course it's a lot more fun when you're rich. heh

LRod...i like this poem a lot. it's catchy :mrgreen:

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