Studio8 - Uniting the Arts

tip-toe thru the daze
stark raving wired
the cat's crazed
endless cycle on a
big round ball
continuously looking
for what will be or not
be the end of it all
spiders jump from
stem to branch
feelings burn as I
take that chance
yet it's all in the turn
of the tides, the road
forever winds, leaves ya
with no place to hide
on the savannah a
newborn wildebeast
jumps to it's feet
all along the banks of
the river, waterfowl
make their hasty reteat
one filament, a single fibre
dangling out there in the dark
let's ya know that to keep
movin', it's the only Way
to truly depart..............WIREMAN

"spiders jump
from stem to branch
feelings burn
as I take the chance..."

I love that. It's a cool ditty mantra.
This is a really good poem mark, I like the way that you throw a rhyme in there, it really works, like magic!
I do think the ya's would be better as you's.....but I'm a stodgy old crone, don't mind me.
enjoyed this muchly....
Hest

Fine work.

the road
forever winds, leaves ya
with no place to hide
on the savannah a
newborn wildebeast
jumps to it's feet
all along the banks of
the river, waterfowl
make their hasty reteat ...

Favourit e lines.

O Mongolia! _ 1st thought - what a breakfast ! Thx Mark !

Here's one I just wrote about poetry night.......

That's true - seen it happen - can always tell the presence of the word because when it speaks everything around it gets real quiet