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Dirge of Orpheus
Posted: March 28th, 2008, 6:00 pm
by westcoast
Founder of the greek mysteries
Your alphabet duels with my pen
Spewing Jell-O over Apollo and Dionysus
Such intrinsic beauty is incomprehensible
I strum my lyre in a cascade
Upon your crystalline lyricism
Sappho snorts..
cinching the belt of her khakis
A little tooooo tight
Seldom has lack of compromise been
So miraculously evoked
Lodged on barren crags
The modern self
Sleeps entwined in hymns
Of duty and culture
Wingless ciphers
With bellies full of mundane pangs
Croak skyward Freudian abortions
With out revelation, all
Uncompromising in spirit or tone
But, I digress,
“A woman is something with smell”
And you have lost her scent
It is time to abandon the time machine
Or modernize the myth
Examine how the Expressionists revolted
Poke the heap of archaeological rubble
Buy a pack of gum, blow a bubble
Float the code from then to now
Posted: March 28th, 2008, 6:08 pm
by constantine
you have raised the bar westie.
Posted: March 28th, 2008, 6:12 pm
by westcoast
Posted: March 28th, 2008, 6:24 pm
by mtmynd
where have
you been?
enjoyed. (really)
Posted: March 29th, 2008, 11:45 am
by westcoast
thank u, mtmynd

glad you enjoyed.
~westcoast
Posted: March 29th, 2008, 3:58 pm
by mnaz
"mundane pangs"...
Now there's a nice body blow.
Thank Apollo for reinvention, i guess.
Posted: March 30th, 2008, 9:35 pm
by Totenkopf
Dionysius, that mad panderer-minstrel, was rather overrated, especially compared to the cold Apollonian light (as Plato realized..............). Interesting images............
Posted: April 1st, 2008, 9:08 am
by stilltrucking
“A woman is something with smell”
I wondered about that quote
So I googled it
Are you quoting yourself?
I damn sure lost the scent
And freud commited suicide after the last abortion
so I am on my own.
as I try to
Float the code from then to now
Beautiful poem
sorry about the spree
I hope it was not a distruption
Posted: April 1st, 2008, 10:03 am
by westcoast
hi jt

yes, i wrote this poem originally a few years back to celebrate another poet.
the line about a woman and her smell was based upon, if i remember right, musings i had about the movie "The Scent of a Woman"
i like it when you comment as you do. it always inspires me, so don't stop
cheers,
westie
Posted: April 1st, 2008, 3:11 pm
by Terri
truck (is that the short way to say it?) is right, the woman "quote" is good. SO many good lines here; I liked the belt-cinching, and something about "Seldom has lack of compromise been
So miraculously evoked" makes me laugh. I agree w/ Dino about this one, "raised the bar".
Posted: April 1st, 2008, 4:53 pm
by Lightning Rod
nice westie,
and I'm with everybody else on the
“A woman is something with smell”
line caught my eye immediately
did you put that in quotes because it was actually from the movie?
(my comment on greek mythology in poetry doesn't apply here...haha)
Posted: April 1st, 2008, 5:25 pm
by constantine
ouch!
Posted: April 1st, 2008, 7:04 pm
by westcoast
thanks y'all
the line is in quotes so i can only assume, being scrupulous as i am about such matters, that it is a line from the movie. maybe the old man talking??
great zeus LR! what trouble(s) have you stirred now
~westie
Posted: April 1st, 2008, 7:39 pm
by stilltrucking
I bet you a dollar to a donut it is not from the movie.
I think it is from you
I wondered why you put it in quotes
I only got one google hit for it
and it was your poem
That movie left me misty eyed
That was a bad old man.
It was stunning poem
thank you
Posted: April 1st, 2008, 7:53 pm
by stilltrucking
No wait
I just found this
A woman is something with smell.
Inexpressible. Pass away. Bloom, reseda.
The south is in there, shepherd and sea.
From here