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Afterlife
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 8:09 am
by saw
I never take a woman home
that I met ten minutes ago
in a dive like this unless she
uncrosses her legs like Sharon Stone
and blows menthol smoke in my face.
Nor was I comfortable trying to drive my car
with a probing wet tongue in my ear, but
I was pleased that I can adapt so quickly.
When you excused yourself to freshen up
I never expected a she-devil outfit,
the red lacy bra, the skull cap with horns,
the plastic pitchfork you prodded me with.
I thought only the soul brothers
still smoke Kools and costume shops
were only open around Halloween
but a guy I work with says,
"Fredericks of Hollywood has all that shit, man."
And if this really is Hell,
then maybe
I've been worrying about nothing.
Re: Afterlife
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 8:24 am
by Doreen Peri
saw wrote:
And if this really is Hell,
then maybe
I've been worrying about nothing.
Hahahahahahaha!
Yer good!
Funny, fun, and charming piece. Great way to enter a room.
Welcome to the Studio, saw!
I'm so gllad you found your way here.
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 9:11 am
by gypsyjoker
Afterlife
Excellent title
I don't know if envy is praise
but I wish I could write like that.
I am also very happy you found your way here
saw
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 11:06 am
by the mingo
welcome aboard,saw, hope you will be agreeing with me that you will find excellent traveling companions hereabouts...the place is full to the gunwales with them...Shiny piece ya opened with...hope ya got many more...see ya 'round...
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 11:16 am
by saw
Hey Doreen, thanks for the invitation and thanks for the feedback on the poem.......thanks as well to gypsyjoker and mingo, I appreciate the welcome and the compliments ......
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 12:15 pm
by constantine
it was only a matter of time , saw. you turn up like a bad penny - my nemesis, my buddy!
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 1:34 pm
by Arcadia
hell tends to be very localist, yeah!!!!!!
welcome here past-form-of-to-seeeeee!!!!!!
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 2:10 pm
by hester_prynne
Indeed, why worry?
This is an ace of a poem.
H
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 5:15 pm
by saw
thanx dino, my friend...at last I have found you...no you can't have my telephone number....
Thanks as well for the welcoming, Arcadia, I've never been called
the-past-form-of-seeeeee, but I like it.
Thanks too, to hester-...appreciate your feedback.....
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 5:24 pm
by Lightning Rod
welcome saw
it looks like we have an immigration situation
everybody wants to migrate to the land of the free
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 5:45 pm
by saw
thanx for the welcome, LR........you may be on to something
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 7:53 pm
by mtmynd
damn! saw, this is one hell of a pome... like a brick shit house. i like the thinkin' behind the writin'...
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 9:27 pm
by westcoast
welcome!
~westie
Posted: May 23rd, 2008, 10:03 pm
by WIREMAN
sharon stone is a poem
you sure do deliver
my friend.........
Posted: May 24th, 2008, 5:26 am
by saw
thanx for the welcome and comments mtmynd and westie, also
thanks mark, my friend...yes, yes, she is a poem