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The Cruise (song for Fiolex Girls)
Posted: June 5th, 2008, 3:27 am
by emel.scott
On Sappho blue erotic seas
of pheromone injected flocks.
One consequential flying vee
did open sunken treasures locked.
A quickly darting bill of pink
A quid pro quo in lapping waves
She’ll trade the marlin spike me thinks,
to swab the deck of galley maids.
So gone the sleeping seaman's sweat
So strong the tempting angel prows
So come the swell of freedom met
Saluting sailors not endowed
'06
Posted: June 5th, 2008, 4:19 am
by Perdida
woohoo standing in applause, how perfect was this! the rhyme, the meter, the imagery.
your voice is familiar.
Greatly enjoyed e.s
Posted: June 5th, 2008, 8:52 am
by Doreen Peri
Welcome to the Studio, emel.scott!
I had to google
Fiolex Girls and I'm glad I did 'cause I'm now very font of it. Matter of fact, I heart it. But, I'm a typesetter, so what did you expect?
Your poem was neat
reminiscent of Yeets
Or maybe it was great
reminiscent of Yeats.
A rhythmic sexy piece ....
that Fiolex Girl.
But seriously... takes talent to write such perfectly metered end rhyme and the verbiage and images were nice, too.
Looking forward to reading more from you. Good to see you here! I'm glad you found us.
Posted: June 5th, 2008, 9:29 am
by emel.scott
Thank you Perdida, nice to make your aquaintance. I've had a tough time with some of my rhyming pieces, they don't seem to be in great favor these days. Which I don't much care about 'cept they take me days, weeks, months, sometimes years to finish and it's always nice to get some feedback. I'll post more here...as for you D, thanks and I would have been here a lot sooner except I couldn't do the math! (btw I left you a reply on PIB
Posted: June 5th, 2008, 1:02 pm
by Arcadia
well, I´ll have to google fiolex too. No idea, but it sounds & looks somehow like Fiona with a rolex thing!!!!
and yeah, greek-sea is mostly lyric & epic (at least in my reading memory!!!!!!)
bienvenido/a!!!!!
Posted: June 5th, 2008, 1:41 pm
by Doreen Peri
emel.scott wrote:as for you D, thanks and I would have been here a lot sooner except I couldn't do the math! (btw I left you a reply on PIB
There are 3 types of people in this word, emel
1) those who are good at math
and
2) those who aren't
heh
I'll take a look in a bit... still pushing pixels (shop talk)
Posted: June 5th, 2008, 1:46 pm
by emel.scott
pixel pusher
Posted: June 5th, 2008, 1:50 pm
by Lightning Rod
here's another take on the subject of
Cruisin'
welcome to the asylum