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mobius maneuver

Posted: June 30th, 2008, 1:15 am
by Doreen Peri
Intro:

repeat from
infinity
sideways
like a slant
directive
around
a curved
space
of a flat
surface
connected
in a round
about way

__________________

mobius maneuver

gonna have to figure out where to go with it next....everything needs to go somewhere. maybe trash it, cash it in, take it to another level on a dare, or stare it down with my big baby hazels, no blue here 'cept in my heart, gotta get a part of the corner on it, turn it around like a U, do a sideways double-parked maneuver to the street curb, keep the tires off the slant, angle it off the slope, squeeze it in like an outa place wince face, put it where it belongs if you hadn't guessed yet. gonna have to maximize this mess, make a slick trick decision, send it out for a text revision, do it myself with a big blue pencil, stencil my name on it, engraved like it belongs to me 'cause it does, lotsa silver leaves and shit, dip my pen in it, make it work like a top, spin it, spin it, spin it 'til what do i got? i donno but i'm gonna twist it around like a mobius strip, one side connected to the other, walk on down to the sound of my own voice, choice being the viable factor, select a stereo mode, double up on the amplitude, dude, do the wriggle, do the crude nose thumb, dumb like i am, dumb it out, crush the doubt about da bullshit, later say i lit myself up with a match, crash down dutifully near the shadow of a louvered slat, sun peaking in, back arched like a cat and me, scratchin my way out again!

oh shit! i got bit by the fricking bitch and it was me walkin on the wild side of a maneuver in a free rant case of let-me-out-the-fuck-of-here! let me the fuck out! fucking mobius strip goes round and round and i'm like spinnin', damn primary colors melting into mud... car's been wrecked. I'm done, son. you got it girl.

this is a whirl of a rumor
it's justa maneuver,
babe

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 3:04 am
by mnaz
Doreen... The mobius strip thing always kinda freaked me out. The mathameticians think they solved it last year (as mathematicians tend to).
But that is some twisty turny rhythmic riddle.

Note: I spelled "mathematician" wrong. Me fix.

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 6:23 am
by saw
a lot of people don't know that Moby Dick's formal name is Mobius...
he was a rare species of Latin Sperm Whale and the former
Emperor of the Deep.......like your poem....deep that is, but I don't think it's very nice to call Mobius a bitch, even if he did bite you.....
in any case, thanks for clearing a lot of things up for me....good poem

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 9:27 am
by constantine
to me, this is two poems - both good, both obviously different in form . i think they would be better as separate entities of expression - separate entities of expression , i like that. where were we? oh yes, both work well, doreen, but i prefer the first.

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 9:31 am
by Doreen Peri
nazz- the mobius strip freaks me out, too. It's too simple to be so complicated. There are 3 kinds of people in this world. Those who are good at math. And those who aren't. ;)

saw - it was actually the cat that bit me... the one with the arched back... which would be me... the bitch :)

constantine - The first part was just an intro saying I originally posted this in "infinity sideways", my artlog. The piece actually starts at the paragraph format. I'll make an edit to make that clear. :)

thanks for reading, you guys

i honestly have no clue what it means

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 9:35 am
by constantine
i still think the intro is a cool poem. what do you think folks. keep those cards and letters coming in.

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 9:54 am
by Doreen Peri
"it's all a poem" - quote from some unknown, never-to-be-famous poet and that would be moi

i've been saying that for years... ;)

you're a dear, dear dean... thank you for your kind words and attention to my work

sometimes no matter how present i am, i have problems with invisibility

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 9:56 am
by constantine
me too. i've always had the problem of invisibility - except when i wanted to be invisible - then i would just blush.

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 10:18 am
by westcoast
hey D. - again, i enjoy the passion and fun in this piece :)

~westie

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 1:48 pm
by the mingo
cons is right - your intro directionals make a stand alone piece -

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 2:12 pm
by constantine
cons - that's a new one. an kenyan woman at school calls me khan - seems somewhat appropriate - at least the c-version.

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 2:21 pm
by Lightning Rod
constantine wrote:cons - that's a new one. an kenyan woman at school calls me khan - seems somewhat appropriate - at least the c-version.
don't make me say connie :lol:

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 2:25 pm
by constantine
ok.

Posted: July 2nd, 2008, 2:46 pm
by hester_prynne
Hey man, form or whatever has never been something I was too savvy about, but I tell you one thing...I love this Dor.
It's like falling into a friendly tornado of rant, with all kinds of ideas, brilliances going by......to ponder.
Wow. I'll be jumping into to this one more than a few times.
H 8)

Posted: July 4th, 2008, 7:48 pm
by Doreen Peri
thanks hester... glad you fell into my tumble