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One Night

Posted: July 14th, 2008, 6:03 am
by saw
one night I tried to catch
the monsters in my head,
but they were more elusive
than I anticipated,
and I was drinking so fast
the bartender said, "slow down
and let it hit you", but I belted
down the scotch and broke
the cheap snifter with my teeth,
chewing the glass til blood
ran from the corner of my mouth,
blotting the flow with cocktail napkins,
and the red was the most vivid
part of my day, so I swallowed
the shards to cut a pathway
to my heart, slicing open
the blocked passageways
and clearing all the channels
that lead to peace and happiness....
and the gremlins scurried like roaches
to someone else's head.

Posted: July 14th, 2008, 8:59 am
by the mingo
"slow down and let it hit you" - hey, as a piece of advice, that statement packs sand, saw, thanks for all that and lets raise a glass to all the elusive monsters in our heads. Salute!

Posted: July 14th, 2008, 9:03 pm
by goldenmyst
Saw this paints a scene lucid and vivid as an electric dream. Well done.

John

Posted: July 15th, 2008, 6:30 am
by saw
thanx mingo and John.....scene after scene, turns into a life.....

Posted: July 17th, 2008, 11:40 am
by hester_prynne
A Toast to this!
Indeed, another jewel...
Another soulful radiant write...thank you

H 8)

Posted: July 17th, 2008, 4:00 pm
by SmileGRL
saw...raw and as if your tongue spoke from the dark corridors of my miNd and i still hear the echo deeP within. i spoke of gremlins and blood manY times before, but nEver like this and yet aLways like tHis...


[awesome writ]

Posted: July 17th, 2008, 4:27 pm
by saw
thanks a lot hester and smileGRL...you both always make thoughtful
comments........good to hear from ya............peace........steve

Posted: July 17th, 2008, 11:11 pm
by judih
it hurts to feel good