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lost bird's whistle
Posted: July 20th, 2008, 8:44 pm
by mindbum
1
lost bird's whistle. bird's lost whistle.
lost bird-whistle. whistle bird lost.
bird lost bird. lost whistle lost.
thistle word cost. thistle whistle bird.
whistle thistle word. bird word lost.
whistle lost bird. lost bird's whistle.
2
a bird's lost
whistle calls
& echoes
because
it is not a duck.
3
a lost bird's
sad whistle
echoes
an aching call
heard by trees
& lichen-covered ears.
Posted: July 20th, 2008, 8:47 pm
by Lightning Rod
lose the last two verses, bum
first one says it all and in a beautifully enigmatic way
Posted: July 21st, 2008, 12:23 am
by judih
ah, that thistles would whistle once more
i duck when i hear a sad bird
Posted: July 21st, 2008, 2:33 am
by Nazz
U write music.
Posted: July 21st, 2008, 2:02 pm
by mindbum
lr- i initially thought to give each a numeral. as you can see in minor edit. but i've yet to decide the order. or is there more? i'm not in with less just yet. thank you for reading and saying.
judih- birds bristle at a thistle comb.
thanks.
nazz- thank ye sire. let's see what i can do with some sound.
Posted: July 25th, 2008, 6:15 pm
by mindbum
i made a recording of this poem.
http://myspace.com/doomsplaypsycheteria
first track. you should be able to download it if you dont like streaming.
Posted: July 25th, 2008, 9:12 pm
by bennie2
i like "3" but i feel like i'm missing something when i read the rest.
Posted: July 27th, 2008, 1:01 pm
by mindbum
bennie-
thanks for reading.
i feel like 1 resembles the fool's thinkings in 'the sound & the fury'. a gibbering spiraling ditty.
number 2- alas, is a joke about a myth. in these days of the internet it has been long purported that the quack of a duck dost not echo. that makes me laugh.
http://www.acoustics.salford.ac.uk/acoustics_info/duck/
there's even a sick quack track on this site.
as to 3- i'm into lichens. thanks again.