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melting
Posted: July 29th, 2008, 11:29 am
by SmileGRL
i am a snow flake
melting in your mouth
melting. melt-
ing
.
and when you need me
just touch your fingers to your lips
and feel me there. in your breath
or plant me in your hand
and blow me like a kiss
to the stars & beyond
and when i need you
i'll think of you
blowing kisses
all over me
.
Posted: July 29th, 2008, 12:04 pm
by goldenmyst
This swept me away. You play with words in a way which is divinely beautiful. I feel like I've taken a warm bubble bath when I imbibe your verse.
John
Posted: July 29th, 2008, 2:04 pm
by bennie2
beautiful sentiment you've expressed here, mj.
"plant me in your hand/and blow me like a kiss/to the stars and beyond"
this made me think of delicate but prolonged motion. as soft as a blown kiss but prolonged enough to get you to the stars.
like a soft, slightly warm tidal wave flowing upwards, carrying you on its crest, nuzzling, caressing, protecting "to the stars and beyond"
Posted: July 29th, 2008, 5:22 pm
by SmileGRL
john...i love bubble baths so that's a pretty cool comparison. thank you from my heart
bennie...exactly...
Posted: July 29th, 2008, 5:33 pm
by Perdida
my first thoughts after reading this were, "oh wow" then it was "yessss"
Beautiful, is just not enough for this piece, those ending lines had ME melting.
Thank you
Posted: July 29th, 2008, 6:09 pm
by mtmynd
your melt is hot.
Posted: July 29th, 2008, 7:34 pm
by Odette
Sensuel. Très bon.
Posted: July 30th, 2008, 9:54 am
by SmileGRL
perdida, cecil, odette...*she curtsies* thank you kindly
melt i do
like chocolat
fondue...