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grotesque

Posted: July 29th, 2008, 6:24 pm
by Odette
The elevator. A shiny tin can. Coffin.

I stare at feet encased in Italian leather to avoid. Everywhere house of mirrors. Bad hair. Lips ricochet off metal walls.

I miss my floor. Key it again. The elevator stops, I hold my breath. Clenched fists. Pretty cell phone impromptu brass knuckle.

A girl walks in. Bow-legged Geisha. Looks with curious dark eyes.

I look away. Confront the image of us. Wall, to wall, to wall, to wall.

Posted: July 29th, 2008, 6:34 pm
by mtmynd
welcome, odette and thank you for this most interesting introduction.

i hope you make it to your floor with no serious problems...

Posted: July 29th, 2008, 7:28 pm
by Odette
Oui, Monsieur. Tout est bien. Merci, beaucoup.

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 9:49 am
by SmileGRL
elevators can be scary/uncomfortable places (...or it can be very sexy). i enjoyed this Odette, specially "lips ricochet off metal walls" well said

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 10:33 am
by Odette
:)

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 11:58 am
by saw
vivid images emerge in your colorful language.....cool scene....steve

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 1:08 pm
by Arcadia
I stare at feet encased in Italian leather to avoid

Confront the image of us. Wall, to wall, to wall, to wall.

I loved the details!!!!! :)

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 2:26 pm
by bennie2
beautifully captured moment, Odette.

i lived on the 14th floor of a tower block for 18months and never once thought of how pretty/scary/sexual/charged lifts can be.

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 4:27 pm
by Odette
Saw, merci. You have much good writing here.

Arcadia, details oui!

Bennie2, our greatest moments are in the lift. Merci.

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 4:37 pm
by mtmynd
your avatar... egon, yes?

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 4:49 pm
by Odette
Oui! Et tu, mon ami? Geiger?

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 5:03 pm
by mtmynd
no. no Geiger. my own painting, merci.

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 9:40 pm
by Odette
Droit dessus !

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 10:25 pm
by mtmynd
''Droit dessus"

translation please... :)

Posted: July 30th, 2008, 10:31 pm
by Doreen Peri
Literally, it means "top right" in french.

I suspect it's an idiom for top shelf or good stuff... something like that.

Of course, you didn't ask me but hey, since I was here when you asked, I figured I'd answer anyway. ;)