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you. i breathe
Posted: August 8th, 2008, 10:01 am
by SmileGRL
i bReathe the uNcut flowers grOwing in your soul. grow groW she whiSpers drEams. coMe fill my ear. i drink you tHirsty with grins gRowing roots in laUghing wrinkles kiSsed my eyes. your whiMsical heaRt is fertile ground is bEautifully siLLy jokes is sWeet warm tea nourishing my fAiry berry dreams liFting me up up uP. i aM the sUn. sunrays nO greys. just yelloW blooms filling my nose kiSsing both iLashes with petalled fiNger aFternoons. tea? 4for 2two. pOpcorn & winged cocoons. yOu pull me iN you sPin me deep stuCk in favorite cookie trees. leaves rustle my kNees. you plaNt me like an uN cut fLower. yoU. i breathe
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Posted: August 8th, 2008, 10:09 am
by constantine
great day on big rock candy mountain- excellent work!
Posted: August 8th, 2008, 10:31 am
by SmileGRL
candy mountain...haha. so clever you are. so...not blind. thanks dino. great day? yes! have one...
Posted: August 8th, 2008, 4:50 pm
by bennie2
i read this in work today, mj. inside my head i read it aloud and it has a real internal rhythm. if I had a better voice i'd record it and send it to you. i use your capitalisations as musical rests and stresses.
uncut flowers with a chance to take root
to grow
to flourish in dirt
cut flowers prepared for sale
to drink from clear waters
then die in days
Posted: August 10th, 2008, 10:11 pm
by goldenmyst
MJ, you spin cotton candy dreams into tapestries of woven beauty.
John
Posted: August 11th, 2008, 5:53 am
by Perdida
you plaNt me like an uN cut fLower. yoU. i breathe
Damn that's beautiful.
Posted: August 11th, 2008, 4:12 pm
by SmileGRL
bennie...that's perfect! and yes...
john...you always make me smile. thanks
perdida...* she curtsies* thank you kindly
Posted: August 12th, 2008, 11:52 am
by sweetwater
deconstructing mathematics
until the emotions become real
Posted: August 12th, 2008, 2:51 pm
by SmileGRL
sweetwater...emotions are always real. it's the mathematics that sometimes get in the way...
Posted: August 12th, 2008, 2:58 pm
by hester_prynne
just a delightful read, thru and thru, again and again....
H
Posted: August 12th, 2008, 3:01 pm
by SmileGRL
thank you miss hester. glad i delight, more than once
Posted: August 12th, 2008, 5:49 pm
by mtmynd
yes, Hes'... 'delight' is the perfect adjective for this piece.
very real, mj... and original as you are. keep doin' it.
Posted: August 12th, 2008, 8:29 pm
by Lightning Rod
Yes, this is a piece with great whimsey, SG.
What dino was quoting was a Woodie Guthrie tune
Here is my whimsical version of it:
Big Rock Candy Mountain
Posted: August 13th, 2008, 12:52 am
by emel.scott
Thanks Clay, listening was like a lullaby for me this evening. I'll sleep better because of it.
Scott
Posted: August 13th, 2008, 1:04 am
by Lightning Rod
emel.scott wrote:Thanks Clay, listening was like a lullaby for me this evening. I'll sleep better because of it.
Scott
thank you scott
that's one of the highest compliments I could imagine
I love to put people to sleep...haha
I used to sing this tune to my daughter as a lullaby
hats off to Woody
