unexplained pain

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bennie2
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unexplained pain

Post by bennie2 » August 8th, 2008, 5:42 pm

some words

are just

a bell

too loud

and now

I'm fa-

-lling deaf

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Post by panta rhei » August 8th, 2008, 5:56 pm

the fall of mankind

some words are just

some bells too loud

some falls are made
of leaves
of man

of pride that
has gone
before it

has gone deaf
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Post by bennie2 » August 8th, 2008, 6:03 pm

life is a tree
shedding skin.

each man is a leaf

each new day
a continual autumn

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Post by panta rhei » August 8th, 2008, 6:13 pm

man is an autumn
stirring trees
causing fall
blowing winds
provoking change

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Post by bennie2 » August 8th, 2008, 6:23 pm

a blowing wind
caused a change:
a leaf blown long
fell over a young sprouting
sapling in the dirt.
the shade provided chance of growth

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Post by panta rhei » August 8th, 2008, 6:36 pm

shade became shelter
sprout lost doubt
grew stout
stuck out snout
scouted about
dared to come out

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Post by bennie2 » August 8th, 2008, 6:53 pm

in daring to come out,
to grow,
from sprout,
to sky, stretching,
the delicate bud becomes
a definite tree...

and thanks the sheltering leaf in passing

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Post by bennie2 » August 8th, 2008, 6:56 pm

small aside:
thank you for helping to turn my unexplained pain into a definite tree

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Post by the mingo » August 8th, 2008, 8:01 pm

What a thread ! (adjectives fail me)
Doll, you may have found a place of rest but I'm still on the trail.

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Post by panta rhei » August 9th, 2008, 8:18 am

i think it's the unexplained pain tree definition formula that led us this way...

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Post by SmileGRL » August 11th, 2008, 3:50 pm

...of bells and trees and words that hurt i choose trees. they grow roots in words not meant to hurt & they continue to charm. most delicate sounds. if you just stop to listen to the leaves and the birds visiting the branches growing deep growing in eyes on you & if you stop to listen maybe you'll see a fairy hidden inside the wound trying to deep clean trying to kiss it better trying trying sitting crosslegged with ears that are big and soft. grow grow roots & grins & ears that won't wilt. because we are trees of the flowering kind...

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