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at the moons request

Posted: August 12th, 2008, 6:33 am
by Perdida
i must’ve wished for you a little
when i listened for wings
two summers ago

when you came flying
between delicate feathers

at the moons request

i should’ve wished a little harder
when that train whistle rattled
my thoughts

but, you did rise from the past
to be here
like a phantom winter
your eyes weeping like twilight
your hands, dank in uneasy repose

there was no sadness like our own
in that waiting room we shared
the one that opened to the sea

in fluent aloneness


©100508

Posted: August 12th, 2008, 11:23 am
by sweetwater
all paths to love must be true
as words express themselves
over coffee and a morning
almost sublime
surreal in the content
of favourite words and phrases

Posted: August 12th, 2008, 2:42 pm
by SmileGRL
perdida...you have such a gentle way with words spinning and bending phrases until they fit an emotion. i love reading them. as for the sadness behind it...a hug

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 4:36 am
by Perdida
sweetwater and smileGRL, you are both so kind, thank you for your lovely lovely reply.
smileGRL, thanks also for the hug...hug, backatcha.

:D

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 12:42 pm
by bennie2
this is a beautifully crafted thing, perdida.

"flying between delicate feathers"

"like a phantom winter
your eyes weeping like twilight..."

gorgeous images.

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 3:00 pm
by panta rhei
calmly in the moonlight
on waves incessantly rocking
we are drifting in the same sea

quiet! quiet!
the gentle call is for you, my love!

carried by dark water
we are singing the same quiet song
and with wet faces
are listening to the heartbeat of the sea

still!
a beating of wings I have heard
it is your soul
on light pinions
it flew to the moon
and now is returning
to sway together with me
in the rhythm of the waves

in deep water
we are surging
away from each other
towards one another
while on the horizon
a streak of light is appearing
and soft morning air is caressing us


... perdida. this was beautiful.

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 8:39 pm
by Arcadia
I specially liked the title
&
there was no sadness like our own

moon is almost round again, perdida!! :wink:

Posted: August 16th, 2008, 7:53 am
by Perdida
bennie, thank you for the "gorgeous" happy you liked. :D

panta rhei, omg, what you wrote, what you did, was totally beautiful and totally awesome.... Thank you! :D

Veronica, let me tell you...there was no sadness like our own...., and this "moon is almost round again" inspired. Thank you Lady. :D