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1st person, 3rd person singular

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 1:25 am
by Doreen Peri
1st person, 3rd person singular
proprietary and confidential discoveries in the realm of conspicuous existence

He speaks in the third person.
He said she said this, she meant that.

He is the narrator, the prevaricator, the
cross synergist of whispers and facets,
the stone cold coal of explanation,
the diamond reflection
thousands upon thousands of
tons piled on to create evidence,
proof of innocence.

I, on the other hand, am a note taker,
a faker of poetic wit,
a bit smitten by language.

I speak in the first person,
The only person I know.

I am completely and totally out of it.
I'm sure there are observers who would concur.
According to him, I'm just her.
.
.
.

dp.8.14.08

___________
infinitysideways

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 2:05 am
by mnaz
Yes. And according to her I'm just him.
It just goes in a vicious circle sometimes.

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 4:21 am
by stilltrucking
vicious circle
is that like a pizza with topped piranhas
instead of anchovies?

is anybody right
when everybody is wrong?

war of the pronouns

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 4:33 am
by mnaz
good question.

the war of the pronouns.

yeah, really the only good question.

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 4:38 am
by stilltrucking
a good poem too

You got me thinking about the pyschopathology of geometric shapes
passive agressive squares
paranoid trianges

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 6:49 am
by the mingo
I had a triange once. It was nightwatch blue. I painted it flat black & wrote the word "snow" on her flank. Sometime after this she ran off with a traveling psychopathology. I paranoided for awhile then went geometric. Too poem a good. All star with sky behind it. A lung top of sing thing. *Sparkle*

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 10:27 am
by Doreen Peri
mnaz .... yes... circular, it is :)

trucking ..... we're all right :)

mingo ... i sparkled ya? wow :) (enjoyed your poetic reply)

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 3:02 pm
by panta rhei
doreen - this is great!

Posted: August 15th, 2008, 1:15 am
by Doreen Peri
thanks panta

i had an edit for the end of it earlier today in my head but now i've forgotten what it was

i hope i can remember it because it improved the ending

i appreciate you reading and replying.

Posted: August 16th, 2008, 2:44 am
by emel.scott
D, I don't get prevaricator Are you saying he's lying about you?

Posted: August 16th, 2008, 5:35 pm
by hester_prynne
Brilliant.
H 8)

Posted: August 16th, 2008, 6:36 pm
by Perdida
fantastic Doreen! :D

Posted: August 17th, 2008, 10:54 am
by Doreen Peri
emel .... the "he" in this piece is a fictitious he and the text of the poem isn't clear about what he's lying about but yeah, a prevaricator is a liar. Thanks for reading. :)

hest ... brilliant? nah... just simple like me... simple. :) thanks

maree .... thanks very much. :)