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Sun melts a hole in the chocolate

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 1:16 pm
by mnaz
The mystics are all on LSD,
all bent over and chanting up the sun.
They got lucky a few billion years ago.
Sun is just angry and wobbles.
Gravity is like black string cheese.
We pushed off with a mighty kick.
Whoosh whoosh of green arteries,
chanting up dirt inside rolling rock,
ears to space between electrons.
Whoosh whoosh hungry noise.

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 3:53 pm
by SmileGRL
this piece should be read out loud. i like it

Posted: August 14th, 2008, 11:58 pm
by mnaz
stripped-down, simulated hallucinopoem..
you know what they say: write what you don't know...
intriguing inner/outer zoom in places. hmm... not sure.
the sun really does wobble...

Thanks Smile. maybe I will voice it...

Posted: August 15th, 2008, 12:20 am
by mtmynd
sG : "this piece should be read out loud."

... and recorded, so we can all hear it.

challenging piece, emnaz. i like it, too.

Posted: August 15th, 2008, 12:42 am
by judih
yes, definitely
your voice,
your whooosh
wanna hear it.