skytrain to nut house

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Axanderdeath
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skytrain to nut house

Post by Axanderdeath » August 15th, 2008, 2:51 pm

She sits talking to her
friends
on the
sky train
waiting for
responses
to no one

“oh but she is a demon
a vampire!”
rasping laughter

insane people
fascinate me

I never make Eye
contact
in fear of contraction

GAP
thus spoke G.A.P.
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Post by Lightning Rod » August 15th, 2008, 3:16 pm

this piece is totally mystifying to me subject-wise
I don't know what the fuck you are talking about
but I like the way it reads


'rasping laughter' has great percussion and sibilance.
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

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Post by Nazz » August 15th, 2008, 4:47 pm

I pictured wacked-out woman talking to an invisible "sky train"...
Nice sketch.
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Post by mtmynd » August 15th, 2008, 5:58 pm

i've seen a few of those types myself, altho not on the sky train...
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Post by emel.scott » August 16th, 2008, 2:39 am

I always make eye conract, I'm just so lonely
We should not mind if on our ear there fell. Some less of cunning, more of oracle...Thoreau
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