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1313 Drivelly Lane

Posted: August 23rd, 2008, 4:55 pm
by Nazz
Welcome to my drip tank,
where the floor is cold and beer is warm,
where wallboards warp and women are flat,
where the paint is fresh and chips are stale.

Welcome to my insipid lips,
where quatrains pale and the image fails,
where sextets are sterile and metaphor, puerile,
where the muse masturbates, verse equivocates.

Step into minor hell, the beige hole.
Let's write a long poem about sprawl,
about gushing, smog-ridden souls.
I can't wait to spill it all.

Posted: August 23rd, 2008, 5:21 pm
by Lightning Rod
this is a very amusing poem, nazz

love 'muse masturbates' --great alliterative image
and 'beige hole' is great understatement

Posted: August 23rd, 2008, 5:32 pm
by constantine
you've been on quite a creative roll. fine work.

Posted: August 24th, 2008, 9:30 am
by Arcadia
Nazz!... it´s a so saturday-poem!!! :lol: I´ll whistle it next time, but now the day is so bright!!!!!, the river is waiting...!!!
thanks for the inspiration!! :wink:


(the three wise monkeys don´t work
smoking islands
no-mirrors)

you´re welcome

warm your feet in the seventy´s rug
while I listen to you singing
Guns ´n´roses & Joaquín Sabina

drink,
saviour also my drops



(los tres monos sabios no funcionan
islas fumando
no hay espejos)

bienvenido

entibiá tus pies en la alfombra setentosa
mientras te escucho cantar
canciones de Joaquín Sabina
& de Guns ´n´Roses

tomá,
saboreá mis gotas, también

Posted: August 25th, 2008, 12:52 pm
by Nazz
Thanks L Rod, Dino, Arcadia...

Inspired by Bennie. Thanks! !sknahT

Arcadia! 'three wise monkeys'... oh that's good. can I steal that one? And savor, I will!

Posted: August 25th, 2008, 12:56 pm
by Doreen Peri
This is a fine piece of writing!

*rising to applaud*

very nice

Posted: August 25th, 2008, 12:59 pm
by Nazz
Thanks Doreen.

My meter was running on this one... ha...

Posted: August 25th, 2008, 1:46 pm
by Arcadia
wow! great weekend-chain-production!!!!!!! :D savor?? hey, you won´t saviour them??? :lol:

the fourth? sure! :wink:

Posted: August 25th, 2008, 3:21 pm
by Nazz
ha! cuando pienso en 'savor', pienso en sabor. sabroso... cuando pienso en 'saviour', pienso en Jesus... hehe..