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Reflection in a cloud?

Posted: August 30th, 2008, 2:33 am
by hester_prynne
Macho thin.
And the dude had a
high voice too,
when he was out of
his indulgences.
I ran into him one night,
in an alley on first avenue.
I remember it was raining,
how shiny the dirty brick road was
under the streetlights.
It was my element.
My home...where I slept
with other lost souls.
Smartmouth didn't last long there.
His sharp little jokes
didn't amuse us fatties.
His tales of injustice
wore too much
costume jewelry
for us gems.
That little fucker
used to interrupt moonlight
when she'd
beam on the river
just for us!
We'd snicker,
wonder,
how did narcissus
see his reflection in a cloud?
He cried when we ate the cookies
his mama sent him.
He was the skinny boy
on the beach.
Pretending not to be
who he was.
Sometimes his protruding bones
made us hungry.
He left after a few months.
We hardly remember him.
But those cookies were
sure good.

Posted: August 30th, 2008, 3:08 am
by Shem
HA!
a good rib roast sounds great but I always have had a weak spot for cookies!

Love it!

Posted: August 30th, 2008, 5:29 am
by Doreen Peri
This is wonderful! A really fine piece, hest!

excellent writing!!!!!!
That little fucker
used to interrupt moonlight
when she'd
beam on the river
just for us!
brilliant! love it ...

also, it made me hungry..... going to go get some cookies ;) i've got the pepperidge farm kind... thin little wafers (but not too thin) with a layer of chocolate and nuts.... mmmmmm..... might have 3 or 4 ...

Posted: August 30th, 2008, 3:03 pm
by constantine
nice style - hip, but somehow tragic - reminds me of nathaniel west's day of the locust.

Posted: August 30th, 2008, 3:11 pm
by Lightning Rod
this is some of the best writing I've seen from you Hest

takes you somewhere an has story

here's a louis prima tune as accent

Lrod version

Posted: September 2nd, 2008, 1:55 pm
by Nazz
..'his tales of injustice wore too much costume jewelry'...

.. a poem that tells a tale, makes one view and re-view.

For some reason I keep thinking of a motormouth GOP drone decked out in flag lapel pins trying to pose with Gulf Coast hurricane victims... I gotta shut off that damned teevee. Nice, Hest.

Posted: September 2nd, 2008, 5:38 pm
by Perdida
That little fucker
used to interrupt moonlight
when she'd
beam on the river
just for us!

Sometimes his protruding bones
made us hungry.
Hest, loved it all. Thank you for a gr8 read.

:D

Posted: September 3rd, 2008, 1:47 pm
by Arcadia
him, us & cookies!! what a triangulation!!!!! :lol:

I loved the title, also!!!!!! :D

Posted: September 8th, 2008, 1:43 pm
by sweetwater
yes the narciss reference
is quite allegorical for the forum

Posted: September 9th, 2008, 1:42 am
by saw
"It was my element.
My home...where I slept
with other lost souls."......................great stuff

strong work from top to bottom, you're in the zone, hester....
keep in rollin' sister.......