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Using Your Head

Posted: October 30th, 2008, 12:07 pm
by saw
who cares about
getting stuck
in a traffic jam if
we're together
solving the riddle
of the universal mysteries
that plaque mankind
let the fucking cars pile up
for twenty five miles
we'll shut off the engine
crawl into the backseat
slither beneath
that old Indian blanket
laughing at the angry horns
of amplified profanity
that echo from a different reality,
til Officer Deadpan
whacks on the glass
with his custom billy club
and we can see our faces
in his big fat mirrored shades,
when he asks us
what we are doing, we will
reply in unison, "Just tryin'
to stay warm officer, just
tryin', to stay warm."

Posted: October 30th, 2008, 3:54 pm
by Perdida
make good use of your time, i agree, i would do the same, trying to keep warm that is *smile* really enjoyed this, the ending made me smile big.

thank you saw.

p

:D

Posted: October 31st, 2008, 6:07 pm
by saw
hey Perdida...for me, one response like yours makes it all worthwhile,

writing that is....if I can somehow produce a smile, my work is done here.....thanks again for your kind response........steve

Posted: October 31st, 2008, 7:07 pm
by Doreen Peri
this is a really great poem, steve! i've been busy being a witch of a mom, trying to get the goblins ready and didn't see this until now

i love the images and humor...

thanks for posting it!.... you're a fine poet! (you know i'm a fan..)

Posted: October 31st, 2008, 8:48 pm
by goldenmyst
Saw I love this poem. The humor and Zen of driving make for heady poetry.

John

Posted: November 1st, 2008, 5:59 pm
by saw
thanx a zillion Doreen, yes you have made me feel comfortable that you are a fan and I appreciate that....thanks as well John, it's always good to hear opinion because I am a great admirer of your work.......take care...peace and happy writing,....steve

Posted: November 2nd, 2008, 10:06 pm
by hester_prynne
A real warm and dignified delight....
H 8)

Posted: November 3rd, 2008, 7:23 am
by saw
thanx hester.....I appreciate it.