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your voice like springtime
Posted: November 14th, 2008, 6:30 pm
by Perdida
your voice like springtime
announces its arrival
carried to me by the dawn -
deliberately
a bird in song, i hear it
soaring with wings
calculated
a voyage sun-up
a bonfire full and happening
a watchfulness, a spread of
kisses, and the stretch of fingers
across the clock-face
you gather me, like a fallen thing
and through your lips
your mouth
that is full of flowers
and petal-waves -
i let fall the winter.
© 151108
Posted: November 15th, 2008, 1:12 am
by K&D
I'm making a list of my favorite intimate yummy words and I've just added spread and stretch and deliberatly...i have no idea what will happen to this list bu I feel a little like David Bowie, he use to collect favorite words and put them together we'll see.
I got a question for you personally, Um I have a bit of a problem with writters block, all the time...i have a hard time starting, I"m a better editor, working on a bit of a buzz so maybe it'll help me out tonight but probably not...thus the question. Seems to me, correct me if i'm wrong that you write and its not like stream o thought, like how i write so what do you do to get started?
I"d be interested to know, anyone else have a response i'm interested in hearing them too.
I liked the poem, consious again, got to learn to do that.
Posted: November 15th, 2008, 6:14 pm
by constantine
for me, it's like an actor digs into his experience in order to understand his character. i try to access someting that has had an emotional effect upon me - i try to get into that feeling and memory and see where it leads. when i drift into that state of awareness, the poetry is there waiting to be written.
hell, i almost forgot to mention the poem - it has vibrancy - young and alive. always enjoy your work, perdida.
Posted: November 16th, 2008, 12:52 am
by K&D
what if it doesn't happen that often? like me....
Posted: November 16th, 2008, 4:51 pm
by Perdida
Hey, thank you for your replies Constantine and K&D...
well i don't sit there and say to myself, "i'm going to write a poem now" Usually what happens ( during my day to day living) is a phrase, a word, or something i hear, see, and feel comes to me unexpectedly and that triggers my thoughts and yeah i feel a poem coming. So if it is a phrase i write it down, and sometimes i know exactly where it is going to go or i might have to look at it for a while, just depends. But i don;t say to myself "today i will write a poem" Just in the past few months i've been writing some but for the last year or so i've had writers block... probaby due to too much going on in my life, or, wait a minute..is that, not enough, hmmmm *grins*
Thanks again

Posted: November 16th, 2008, 5:54 pm
by mtmynd
nice piece, perdida... enjoyed!
Posted: November 18th, 2008, 2:12 pm
by stilltrucking
Made me feel like Chance the Gardener in Being There
Thank you
Posted: November 19th, 2008, 3:30 pm
by Perdida
mtmynd, thank you for reading so happy you enjoyed
stilltrucking, thank you so much, may i ask though, who Chance the Gardener is?

Posted: November 20th, 2008, 5:11 am
by stilltrucking
A character in a Peter Sellers movie called
Being There
Based on the novel by Jerzy Kosinski.
“As long as the roots are not severed there will be growth in the spring..."
Posted: November 21st, 2008, 3:49 pm
by SmileGRL
ahhh...love & springtime...it's like graham crackers and cream cheese. it just goes together. i like that the voice is announcing itself and i like that it spreads kisses, stretches fingers and gathers you. "you gather me like a fallen thing"...that is my new favorite phrase of the month. love it.
Posted: November 22nd, 2008, 4:23 pm
by Perdida
stilltrucking, thanks for that, i don;t believe i've seen it.
MJ, crackers and cream cheese, mmmmm you make me crave them now, and it's only 7.20am lol.
your reply,
i like that the voice is announcing itself and i like that it spreads kisses, stretches fingers and gathers you.
thanks Mj, it does, it does all that and more and all through sms, smile.
Thanks for your time
m

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Posted: November 22nd, 2008, 5:43 pm
by hester_prynne
Absolutely delightful beautiful read.
Bravo girl
H

Posted: November 24th, 2008, 3:57 pm
by Perdida
hester, thanks so much for the "delightful" and "beautiful" so happy you liked.
m
