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Lightning Rod
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Post by Lightning Rod » February 13th, 2009, 5:25 pm

my email box is empty
until I hear from you
oh, the usual things are there
I can grow my penis three inches
get herbal remedies
meet mature singles in my area
but until I hear from you
my email box is empty

I can work from home
do background searches
get a degree in penology
or credit cards with no limit
but until I hear from you
my email box is empty
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

The Poet's Eye

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K&D
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Post by K&D » February 14th, 2009, 12:08 am

I liked it...here's why

I like how you use expressions that are you know pop culture refrences/funny little sides and its different then nessisarily emotional-but no less true, and i like how this used those little refrences but expressed/fit with the theme...i mean it worked. you know if your writting about love using funny little pop culture refrences makes it feel a certain way...but this felt like it fit w/message...etc. I thought it was sweet but smart and funny= gender wise- I'd say i admire/would like to be like a smart/funny yet sweet old man+ charming- i know that weird but i've gotten over feeling a need to explain it to myself or others. I think thats why i liked/like you when i was younger-

hard to explain.

i have an interesting"valentines day" poem i'm working on- i feel i'm out of my "intimacy phase" its weird cause i don't know what poems will look like now= i'm just over it- not intimacy by anymeans but you know like writting in that mode- also perhaps i'm spent.
Blah!

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Post by alienpoet » February 14th, 2009, 2:40 am

i'm finding this so sad and so relatable ...if that's even a word.I can dig this write ...cause i go thru it...oh yeah.
read me, but don't play me backwards

dakota alien-sky raphael

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Post by mnaz » February 14th, 2009, 5:20 pm

interesting, that 'work from home' thing.
that's pretty much a can't miss deal.
we gotta 'work from home', eh?
Ok so I'm temporarily Canadian.

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Post by justwalt » February 14th, 2009, 7:39 pm

sorry LRod, but I love it when these's no mail.
many is a word

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