Waisted Time

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Waisted Time

Post by K&D » February 14th, 2009, 3:04 am

You can believe anything in this light
See through this green smoke
Bright light, light bright.

I’ve been rethinking about you
Clinical habitual, habitual clinical
Touch me, Touch you

Two steps forward
Decades apon decades on repeat
Repeat, rinse repeat.

Too slow to scream
I’m in love with you
I’m in love with you

I never looked you in the eye
I never tried to lie
I knew, I had no clue

Nights with you I’ll never remember
waisted time, time waisted.

You were my best friend
I didn't know, I don't know
we were, we were.
Blah!

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Post by Lightning Rod » February 14th, 2009, 2:09 pm

this is a tender and lilting poem, KidDo

I'm curious, did you intend to use 'waisted' instead of 'wasted'?
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

The Poet's Eye

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Post by K&D » February 14th, 2009, 4:17 pm

which is the smarter answer, that i did it on purpose or not? lol?

I use to experiment by taking drugs and trying to feel what it was like to want to be close to people- i did so with my best friend. we were like twins untill we weren't. yeah- haven't talked to her in a couple of years. I can't even remember who i was back then- but i wasn't me.

thanks for the comments.
Blah!

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Post by K&D » February 14th, 2009, 4:17 pm

which is the smarter answer, that i did it on purpose or not? lol?

I use to experiment by taking drugs and trying to feel what it was like to want to be close to people- i did so with my best friend. we were like twins untill we weren't. yeah- haven't talked to her in a couple of years. I can't even remember who i was back then- but i wasn't me.

thanks for the comments.
Blah!

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Post by goldenmyst » February 14th, 2009, 5:22 pm

K&D, friend ships wither on the vine. Your poem speaks to the heart of affection lost on the highways of time.

John

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Post by justwalt » February 14th, 2009, 6:49 pm

there is no time waisted K&D,
if something is repeated, it
was because something was
not fully understood the
first time round
many is a word

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Post by K&D » February 14th, 2009, 11:56 pm

too true wait. that part was a refrence to how stereotypical some of my experiencew are to others before me.

I wonder how you learn thing right?
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Post by justwalt » February 15th, 2009, 12:25 pm

If anything, K&D, I put more effort in learning the human things. They are the only worthwhile things to know. Maybe I've found some shortcuts in learning. One quick key is a book by M. Scott Peck, "The Road Less Traveled"...not the companion book, Further down the road less traveled. It's an easy read...skip the spiritual chapters. But it could be that I'm just an old man who's been down that road long ago. Intense learning about yourself will teach you about others easily. Dig into how a feeling is created. It's deep.

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Post by SmileGRL » February 18th, 2009, 3:33 pm

i like the flow of this...and the honesty. cool writ, KD

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