Prevailing Winds

Post your poetry, any style.
saw
Posts: 8279
Joined: May 23rd, 2008, 7:32 am
Location: B'more, Maryland

Prevailing Winds

Post by saw » February 19th, 2009, 11:44 am

I worked in order to eat
I've regarded my cowardice as genius
found peace in deceiving myself

I looked for the human in human being
found only the writers of accidental circumstance
hidden in the comic pathos

stripped bare to the rib cage
i noticed the dreamer was an educated man
so he purposely withdrew from the world of contingency

he was the artist of his very own life
and the hero of his dreams, dreams of
limitless rapture, unaccountable for the impulses

that oxidized his joints, that threw saltwater
on his desire to remain bright and new, unable
to explain the details of his whims and fancies

floating by me on a bohemian cloud without a rudder
this man so creative, this master of disguises,
this animal, that can get accustomed to anything.
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

User avatar
justwalt
Posts: 895
Joined: January 28th, 2009, 4:18 pm
Location: location infers reality... reality is still a theory

Post by justwalt » February 19th, 2009, 11:57 am

this is very cool, saw, easy to visualize...

walt

User avatar
SmileGRL
Posts: 897
Joined: May 25th, 2008, 4:44 pm
Contact:

Post by SmileGRL » February 19th, 2009, 12:18 pm

such is human nature...fear makes us big, and thus small. "he was the artist of his very own life"...yes. great poetic images weaved through out this, saw. love it

User avatar
alienpoet
Posts: 122
Joined: August 16th, 2004, 8:12 pm
Location: deep in the digs
Contact:

Post by alienpoet » February 20th, 2009, 3:54 am

i like this write esp. this :
he was the artist of his very own life
and the hero of his dreams, dreams of
limitless rapture, unaccountable for the impulses


very nice
read me, but don't play me backwards

dakota alien-sky raphael

User avatar
one of those jerks
Posts: 267
Joined: January 4th, 2009, 12:13 pm
Location: stilltrucking's vanity

Post by one of those jerks » February 20th, 2009, 10:33 am

Nice Work!










so he purposely withdrew from the world of contingency









if you can get it



















sincerely
still trucking
et al
She is twice the man I am.

avatar source

saw
Posts: 8279
Joined: May 23rd, 2008, 7:32 am
Location: B'more, Maryland

Post by saw » February 20th, 2009, 10:45 am

thanx walt, smile, alien and truck.....appreciate the feedback !
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

User avatar
goldenmyst
Posts: 633
Joined: April 25th, 2008, 8:46 pm
Location: Bible Belt :(
Contact:

Post by goldenmyst » February 20th, 2009, 10:19 pm

Saw, I read this several times. You portray this person with the dexterity of Japanese calligrapher. This is what poetry is all about.

John

User avatar
Barry
Posts: 679
Joined: August 14th, 2008, 9:12 pm
Location: Portland, Oregon

Post by Barry » February 20th, 2009, 11:21 pm

I strongly identify with this piece, to a degree. Years ago I heard a voice (my own?) in my head, telling me, "Make your life the artwork." It struck a chord with me from my reading of Kesey, one's life as a movie, bringing them into your movie, etc. Cinema is art. Make of your life art. Live your life like you're in a movie.
When I reach the conclusion, I'll let you know how it all turned out.

Peace,
Barry

saw
Posts: 8279
Joined: May 23rd, 2008, 7:32 am
Location: B'more, Maryland

Post by saw » February 21st, 2009, 1:20 pm

thanx john and barry, enjoyed your comments......take care...
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

User avatar
Lightning Rod
Posts: 5211
Joined: August 15th, 2004, 6:57 pm
Location: between my ears
Contact:

Post by Lightning Rod » February 21st, 2009, 1:37 pm

I've tuned into this piece about three times, steve
it's stronger than an elephant fart
it rings like a ballpeen hammer on a sixteen penny nail

your sense of action and image is a flower in your poetic hat
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

The Poet's Eye

User avatar
hester_prynne
Posts: 2363
Joined: June 26th, 2006, 12:35 am
Location: Seattle, Washington
Contact:

Post by hester_prynne » February 22nd, 2009, 4:45 am

Fucking A.
I'm on the floor in rapture.
I kid you not.
This is an excellent poem.

H 8)
"I am a victim of society, and, an entertainer"........DW

saw
Posts: 8279
Joined: May 23rd, 2008, 7:32 am
Location: B'more, Maryland

Post by saw » February 22nd, 2009, 4:43 pm

thanks so much for the kind words of approval, Clay and hester....
I highly regard your opinions......I kind of liked this one myself, but didn't get any response on a couple of other sites.....so I am pleased to get some favorable comments here at S8.....Thanx
If you do not change your direction
you may end up where you are heading

User avatar
Lightning Rod
Posts: 5211
Joined: August 15th, 2004, 6:57 pm
Location: between my ears
Contact:

Post by Lightning Rod » February 22nd, 2009, 5:10 pm

sometimes it plays in Peoria and sometimes it don't

plus the prophet never gets any respect in his own village
"These words don't make me a poet, these Eyes make me a poet."

The Poet's Eye

User avatar
constantine
Posts: 2677
Joined: March 9th, 2008, 9:45 am

Post by constantine » February 22nd, 2009, 5:17 pm

reminds me somewhat of death in venice.

User avatar
K&D
Posts: 707
Joined: August 13th, 2005, 8:59 pm
Location: Baton Rouge
Contact:

Post by K&D » February 22nd, 2009, 5:42 pm

i really identified with lines in this poem.

It was extremly polished and it didn't feel contrived.

I really loved this work too.

wow-complexity is something that is often missing in poems- either that or poems are complex and they feel like the person wasn't intending to make a work of art so much as get frustrated about something= this felt like neither- this felt perfect.
Blah!

Post Reply

Return to “Poetry”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 25 guests