Studio8 - Uniting the Arts

The lightning and the thunder passed their time,
By making fun of those beneath their show:
"Look," from the Light, "I hit the dynamo
To free the criminal to do his crime."
"Listen," from Sound, "and hear the screaming clime.
They fear their God when hearing what I know
And pray to Him in unrelenting woe."
Now both: "Yes, yes, we are the true sublime."

But through it all my daughter and my son
(The girl is six, the boy, his second year.)
Enjoyed the candle flares and flashlight games;
And when my girl displayed a sudden fear,
My son, dissolving what the storm had done,
Placed his hand on hers between the flames.

Very nice, Yejun! I liked the phrasing "candle flares and flashlight games" (and other wording in this also).

You painted a picture of a moment and took me there. good job with the images and rhythm .... I could just see your son placing his hand on his sister's hand between the flames to ease her fear of the storm.

Good to see you again!

Yeah, things have changed.

Always good to read and see you.

I am with Doreen on this. I could visually see the scene and that is always a sign of a good write. I enjoyed and look forward to more.

yup I agree too, "candle flares and flashlight games"

could see it cleary, bright as day. *grins*

Thanks,

I'm curious as to how people are reading "we are" in L8.

Is it "we ARE"

or "WE are"

I read it as the former but given the God references above, I think a case can be made for the latter.

What's your take?

we ARE

otherwise the meter doesn't sound quite right

I read it as "we ARE"

Much appreciated.

If enough people did read it as "WE are" I would probably have to restructure that line.

Which is something I may do anyway.