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when you were a dancer

Posted: April 1st, 2009, 7:12 am
by Perdida
life was

when sometimes
you danced to the music
on your own:

arms outstretched

your head turning from side to side
oh how you would wear a smile as big as the house
shaking your tail feather

i remember this

standing back, watching you
sometimes laughing
at you . . .

with you:

our eyes danced together
and my smile would always
touch yours
for those few moments
when you were a dancer


~for mum~

© 010409

Posted: April 1st, 2009, 4:51 pm
by Yejun
Hmmm, have I read this before?

At any rate, your dedication at the end makes it a wonderful poem. I picture a young girl throughout the reading only to see that young girl transformed into a 'mum' at the end.

That was good!

Posted: April 1st, 2009, 6:00 pm
by mtmynd
wonderful on many levels, perdida, each as splendid as the other.

Posted: April 1st, 2009, 11:27 pm
by Arcadia
sweet poem, maree!!