Retreat

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K&D
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Retreat

Post by K&D » May 3rd, 2009, 11:33 pm

Retreat

Retreat what a leap!
It was my imagination that made
This choice a relief.

I liked you,
I indulged my every whim
Untill the time I leaved.

Induced this link
Sat on your couch not to think,
It was I who was deceived

Exhaling with a trace
Tension, your soul escaping
As on your ear I weaved

Lowering back,
your eyes were closed
An average wednesday afternoon

Though I complied as you drew me near
Your tongue was duller than your ironic wit
Supprisingly as I had feared.

An average Wednesday afternoon.
Blah!

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Post by mtmynd » May 4th, 2009, 12:51 pm

hey, KiD...

i was just getting adjusted in the seat
ready for the ride
engine purring, put it in first
rollin', baby, rollin'
but then!

Untill the time I leaved.

... jolted I swerve, outta control
hit the brakes and slooooow down

((you comprende what you did to the ride?))

:)
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Post by constantine » May 4th, 2009, 8:44 pm

you've got a style all your own - i think it's hip.

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Post by K&D » May 4th, 2009, 10:14 pm

I hope it makes sense- I mean i thought it did now i'm re-reading it and I'm like what the fuck does it just sound like a string of words.

this poem, i thought i'd try to make myself not the hero...I mean i'm not always the good guy....maybe it could be lengthened?

:wink:

I don't know you ever been in a realtionship because it was easy, and then your not even suprised when it turns out to be not so awesome....but you do it anyways cause your human or I don't know just a tinge needy and induce mothering (people to take care of you) and so you do just cause you can? I'll work on this one....
Blah!

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