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Did Never Should Do

Posted: May 9th, 2009, 5:26 pm
by Yejun
Have you found someone else to curl up
Next to on an Osaka-bound Subway train?
Have you left the city for the country,
Or the country for a city, a town,
a village, a hut in Chiang Mai --
smoking opium with guitar-playing
emaciated Thai?
Have you died without an outcry
or hid from the tax collector --
Obdurate and insecure, or penniless,
Bahtless, wonless, enless?
Crawling to a final phone booth to call home,
Do you still think Alice Walker is good?
What do you do? Where do you live?
I should have married you but never did
And loved you, but I never did.

Posted: May 9th, 2009, 5:34 pm
by Doreen Peri
excellent poem, brad

really loved it!

(spellcheck bathless endless ;))

Posted: May 9th, 2009, 7:53 pm
by still.trucking
I liked it a lot too.

Posted: May 9th, 2009, 10:45 pm
by hester_prynne
Downright brilliant!
H 8)

Posted: May 16th, 2009, 5:28 pm
by Yejun
Sorry for the delay.

Thanks to everybody for their kind comments.

While I suspect that Doreen already knows this, it occurs to me that others might not so here's a quick breakdown:

Baht--Thai money

Won--Korean money

En--Japanese money (the Y is dropped in Japanese)

Though of course I was hoping to trigger some of the associations that Doreen clearly sees.

Thanks again. It's been a rough couple of weeks.

Posted: May 16th, 2009, 5:56 pm
by Doreen Peri
sighh.. didn't even think of it ... just thought they were typos

should have known better

all the years I've known you, i know you are meticulous with your poetry... you'd never post a misspelled word, I don't think

shoulda realized it was an intentional play on words

duh

now i like the poem even more!

Posted: May 16th, 2009, 7:06 pm
by Yejun
Sure I have.

Being "meticulous" also means, at least for me, dealing with a kind of tunnel vision. You get so caught up on one thing that you forget how it interacts with everything else.

I deal with it by knowing that I can always change it and, sure enough, I usually do--just not always right away. :D

Posted: May 16th, 2009, 7:31 pm
by Arcadia
yeah, the risk of having the answers from the beggining, I guess. Great poem! :D